Story: Stumble (You Might Fall)

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Story: Stumble (You Might Fall); by Mars and Artemis
Topic Started: Mar 4 2009, 07:57 PM (1,889 Views)
Artemis	Apr 19 2009, 09:27 AM Post #71
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	We totally forgot to update this shit this week. Oops.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


xolilkelox1	Apr 19 2009, 12:21 PM Post #72
Gang Leader Posts: 2,062 Group: Senior Member Member #10 Joined: September 8, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Xocrazililkelox	Artemis Apr 19 2009, 09:27 AM We totally forgot to update this shit this week. Oops. Does this mean to expect an update?Looks up hopefully
	"Do not stand at my grave and weep." R.I.P. Poppy Scaga you will be deeply missed . 1924-2008


fairlane	Apr 19 2009, 01:51 PM Post #73
Gang Leader Posts: 552 Group: Senior Member Member #18 Joined: September 10, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard	Don't forget! I'm really enjoying this story, Nicole and Devlin's relationship has got that car crash quality where you can't look away even though it's going to be messy lol.



Artemis	Apr 19 2009, 06:24 PM Post #74
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Eh, if we get around to it. I'm really busy this week.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Ebony~Rose	May 3 2009, 10:05 AM Post #75
Greaser Posts: 366 Group: Senior Member Member #122 Joined: January 20, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Curly Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Two-Bit Mathews	Y' know, this Wednesday's going to be May 6th. That's the first Wednesday of the month. That's the first Wednesday of the month. Now, I can't be sure, but that rings a bell in my head for some reason... Anyone? Mars? Artemis? P.S. LOVED Missed Opportunities. Love most well-written Curly fics to be honest, but especially the final chapter of MO, "It's yours." Oh Curly, how you make me laugh :)
	"...Happiness isn't on the road to anything. Happiness is the road." - Bob Dylan "Dream as if you'll live forever; live as if you'll die tomorrow." - James Dean "Reality is a term for people who refuse to see things as they can be, so that they might be, instead seeing things as they are, and lazily assuming that's how they'll always be." - Walter White "The best moments in reading are when you come across something - a thought, a feeling, a way of looking at things - that you'd thought special, particular to you. And here it is, set down by someone else, a person you've never met, maybe even someone long dead. And it's as if a hand has come out, and taken yours." - Alan Bennett, The History Boys


Artemis	May 3 2009, 10:31 AM Post #76
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	It's sweet that you miss it, but I've sort of bailed on fandom right now. I have some SRS issues to attend to.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Mars	May 15 2009, 02:04 PM Post #77
Gang Leader Posts: 8,709 Group: Senior Member Member #1 Joined: September 6, 2007	Updated, finally! http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4902666/7/
	Glenn Withrow Fansite


Artemis	May 15 2009, 05:57 PM Post #78
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Seriously, guys, who do we have to blow? Three reviews over the past two chapters? Like, if it sucks, please tell us. If you don't like the characters, tell us. If you think the plotline blows, please tell us. If it sucks, do not be silent. We can take the abuse. We WANT the abuse. We can always improve our writing, but if we don't know what we are doing wrong, we can't fix it. I mean, the silence is deafening. It's obvious we're doing something wrong, so please just tell us what it is.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Mars	May 15 2009, 06:26 PM Post #79
Gang Leader Posts: 8,709 Group: Senior Member Member #1 Joined: September 6, 2007	Perhaps this should go in review whoring? ;)
	Glenn Withrow Fansite


Artemis	May 15 2009, 06:28 PM Post #80
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Ouch, have I violated the rules? Spank me. ;)
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


rileysmomma	May 15 2009, 06:33 PM Post #81
Gang Leader Posts: 1,897 Group: Senior Member Member #317 Joined: July 27, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Darry Curtis Fanfiction.net Username RileysMomma	Artemis May 15 2009, 05:57 PM Seriously, guys, who do we have to blow? Three reviews over the past two chapters? Like, if it sucks, please tell us. If you don't like the characters, tell us. If you think the plotline blows, please tell us. If it sucks, do not be silent. We can take the abuse. We WANT the abuse. We can always improve our writing, but if we don't know what we are doing wrong, we can't fix it. I mean, the silence is deafening. It's obvious we're doing something wrong, so please just tell us what it is. Sorry, I am horribly far behind in my fic reading and reviewing right now. Bue I've enjoyed what I've read so far - and I think I've reviewed as far as I've read.
	Put on your big girl panties and deal with it! Don't be the person who lights up a room by leaving it. The wisdom of chocolate: "Smile. Everyone will wonder what you're up to." - the message inside my Dove Promises wrapper


fairlane	May 15 2009, 06:56 PM Post #82
Gang Leader Posts: 552 Group: Senior Member Member #18 Joined: September 10, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard	I've only just started reading, but so far I'm really enjoying it. I'm about to review chap 7 sorry, just trying (and failing) to multi-task about 5 things lol. I don't want to guess why anyone else does or doesn't do things, but from my perspective, it's a great story but the initial premise didn't sound that interesting, hence why I haven't started reading and reviewing before now. I just mean the fact that it's set in the future, and that the main focus is the 2nd generation characters, so thats two things that would usually put me off a fanfic. It's actually really good and has held my interest from the start ... I supose I should save all that for the actual review though!



Artemis	May 15 2009, 07:03 PM Post #83
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Yeah, we knew that was going to be a tough row to hoe -- the second gen stuff -- but when people don't say anything, I start getting paranoid that people didn't like it and want to spare my feelings. I'd rather have someone say it sucks and why than try to spare my feelings. At least, I can look at what's not working and try to fix it, dig?
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Ebony~Rose	May 16 2009, 12:29 PM Post #84
Greaser Posts: 366 Group: Senior Member Member #122 Joined: January 20, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Curly Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Two-Bit Mathews	So sorry, guys. Confession time: I never review. Well, not never, but it's a rare (as in five sundays in a month rare). I'm sorry, I love the story. I also loved Triangle, Holding and Darkly, but I'm the laziest reader there is. Sorry for the lack (sorry, no lack, just none) reviews, I'll actually review from now on. You work on chapter after chapter for us, it's only fair you get feedback from us. Again, sorry for being a lazy reader.
	"...Happiness isn't on the road to anything. Happiness is the road." - Bob Dylan "Dream as if you'll live forever; live as if you'll die tomorrow." - James Dean "Reality is a term for people who refuse to see things as they can be, so that they might be, instead seeing things as they are, and lazily assuming that's how they'll always be." - Walter White "The best moments in reading are when you come across something - a thought, a feeling, a way of looking at things - that you'd thought special, particular to you. And here it is, set down by someone else, a person you've never met, maybe even someone long dead. And it's as if a hand has come out, and taken yours." - Alan Bennett, The History Boys


Artemis	May 16 2009, 01:25 PM Post #85
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	It's not so much that people have to review, it's ... well, frankly, I can be a bitch. So I worry that people don't give me negative feedback because they're afraid that I'll flip out, which isn't fair to Mars, because she works really hard, and when she's hitched her wagon to me, I worry that people who would otherwise review her stuff (let's face it, she's more laid back) won't, because of worry about my reaction. However, I met Mars when she offered me concrit, and now we're besties! So ... I promise not to flip out if you think something sucks. Basically, that's what I've been trying to say in a roundabout way.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Mars	May 16 2009, 03:02 PM Post #86
Gang Leader Posts: 8,709 Group: Senior Member Member #1 Joined: September 6, 2007	And if you feel I've somehow gotten bitchified through my dealings with Artemis ... then, you'd be right lol. But I also won't flip, cuz I'm cool like that.
	Glenn Withrow Fansite


Artemis	May 16 2009, 04:34 PM Post #87
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Are you trying to say that I bring out your inner bitch?
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Mars	May 16 2009, 04:35 PM Post #88
Gang Leader Posts: 8,709 Group: Senior Member Member #1 Joined: September 6, 2007	Yes, you do. In the best way possible of course =)
	Glenn Withrow Fansite


Artemis	May 16 2009, 04:39 PM Post #89
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	LOL. Like, the Queen Bitch side?
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Mars	May 16 2009, 04:47 PM Post #90
Gang Leader Posts: 8,709 Group: Senior Member Member #1 Joined: September 6, 2007	I have a Princess Bitch.
	Glenn Withrow Fansite


Artemis	May 16 2009, 04:51 PM Post #91
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	I do love you.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


zevie	May 16 2009, 09:04 PM Post #92
Slashy Queen ... GET IT?! Queen? Hahaha Posts: 3,505 Group: Senior Member Member #8 Joined: September 7, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Fanfiction.net Username zevie/Midori Cha	Hahaha, you may be scary, but for the record, I've given plenty of blunt reviews on your stuff, Artemis, and even when it's obviously personal opinion (and maybe not the best advice sometimes lol - grain of salt with every review!), you've never been anything but receptive. Hell, I don't think you've ever even argued, and you could have. Nobody should be scared of you two lol. (I'm just lazy. I promise I'll review soon.)
	sugar is a fuckiung vegetbale. sugar cane, bitrch! Jesus didn't have fun dip. - Artemis, on Gertrude Stein Sorry to break it to you over Facebook, but look at this way: How much more awkward would it be in person -- for me, anyway. - Artemis, from FaceStalk where I stalked her God gave man Free Will so that man could choose between good and evil. Sadly, God did not give man the knowledge to distinguish good from evil. He only gave that to apples. - Betty Bowers (ish)


kathy	May 24 2009, 05:37 PM Post #93
Future Greaser Posts: 5 Group: Member Member #516 Joined: March 19, 2009	As weird as it sounds, I think the reason I am not as into Stumble and reviewing it is because it is not updated as regularly as Mars other stories were . It seems like the longer between updates, the less I am into it, no matter how good it is...



Artemis	May 30 2009, 06:23 PM Post #94
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	kathy May 24 2009, 05:37 PM As weird as it sounds, I think the reason I am not as into Stumble and reviewing it is because it is not updated as regularly as Mars other stories were . It seems like the longer between updates, the less I am into it, no matter how good it is... This is mostly my fault. It was completely written and edited before we started posting, but I like to look over it one last time before it goes up, and I have an insanely busy hectic life. But, so I can tell Mars that I was a good pimp: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4902666/8/Stumble_You_Might_Fall Devlin does some really horrible shit in this chapter. I'm curious to see what you all think of him now -- is he a total, worthless piece of shit? Or a kid who was doomed from the start?
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


zevie	May 30 2009, 06:26 PM Post #95
Slashy Queen ... GET IT?! Queen? Hahaha Posts: 3,505 Group: Senior Member Member #8 Joined: September 7, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Fanfiction.net Username zevie/Midori Cha	Dooooooomed. But I probably said that in my review. I'm wondering a little bit though, whether he was doomed or fated to be what he is. He's having difficulties right now, but it really seems like his heart and soul is in this - I don't know if you can be doomed to something and still be so committed to it. Maybe he just likes the approval of his old man.
	sugar is a fuckiung vegetbale. sugar cane, bitrch! Jesus didn't have fun dip. - Artemis, on Gertrude Stein Sorry to break it to you over Facebook, but look at this way: How much more awkward would it be in person -- for me, anyway. - Artemis, from FaceStalk where I stalked her God gave man Free Will so that man could choose between good and evil. Sadly, God did not give man the knowledge to distinguish good from evil. He only gave that to apples. - Betty Bowers (ish)


Jen	May 30 2009, 06:37 PM Post #96
Greaser Posts: 307 Group: Senior Member Member #179 Joined: March 29, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Steve Randle Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Fanfiction.net Username some blue december	Have reviewed, will be keeping an eye out for my shiny pony and cookies :D
	I like wine. I like tasting. You know I can party. Let�s do it. Let�s rock it, maturity style!


kathy	May 30 2009, 07:51 PM Post #97
Future Greaser Posts: 5 Group: Member Member #516 Joined: March 19, 2009	Is Alona seducing Devlin on Ray's orders, to get the boy back on track? Huh, guess that is why he made her an honorary Roth



Artemis	Jun 1 2009, 01:48 PM Post #98
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Devlin was pretty much indocrined since birth. I think you'll find that those boys whose mothers remained close to Ray or allowed their sons to remain close to him are pretty much the ones who end up in his organization -- Devlin, Chuck, Eric, Ray-Ray ...
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


zevie	Jun 1 2009, 01:57 PM Post #99
Slashy Queen ... GET IT?! Queen? Hahaha Posts: 3,505 Group: Senior Member Member #8 Joined: September 7, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Fanfiction.net Username zevie/Midori Cha	Timmy? lol. I know the explanation behind him, but would Ray have put some distance between him and his rival's namesake, even subconsciously?
	sugar is a fuckiung vegetbale. sugar cane, bitrch! Jesus didn't have fun dip. - Artemis, on Gertrude Stein Sorry to break it to you over Facebook, but look at this way: How much more awkward would it be in person -- for me, anyway. - Artemis, from FaceStalk where I stalked her God gave man Free Will so that man could choose between good and evil. Sadly, God did not give man the knowledge to distinguish good from evil. He only gave that to apples. - Betty Bowers (ish)


Artemis	Jun 1 2009, 02:04 PM Post #100
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	I sort of see Curly trying to take Ray-Ray, Timmy and Chuck under his wing when he got out of prison (shortly after Tim went in), but it took to varying degrees. The three of them have back-and-forth loyalties. All three love their dad & their mom, but some are smarter than others and can see that their parents are flawed human beings.
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


Kimberley.	Jun 9 2009, 01:31 PM Post #101
Gang Leader Posts: 570 Group: Senior Member Member #475 Joined: December 29, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Two-Bit Mathews Fanfiction.net Username Mercury Jayne & Fall In Line	I HATE YOUR CLIFF HANGERS! What's happening to Nicky?!? Aw poor Ruby...OMG I need to start reviewing this fic!



Artemis	Jun 11 2009, 10:06 AM Post #102
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Nicole dies, Tim escapes and murders Ray & Devlin horribly, then is caught and gets the death sentence. Happy now? ;)
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


the_sly_wink	Jun 11 2009, 12:06 PM Post #103
Royal Portrait Artist Posts: 473 Group: Senior Member Member #63 Joined: October 21, 2007	You could take out the "Nicole and Tim die" part ... Can this be a Choose Your Own Adventure fic? To set Ray's car on fire, turn to page 65.



fairlane	Jun 11 2009, 02:37 PM Post #104
Gang Leader Posts: 552 Group: Senior Member Member #18 Joined: September 10, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard	Was there anything in one of your stories about Ray's upbringing? I was just wondering what it was like and I can't remember seeing anything ... ?



Artemis	Jun 11 2009, 07:41 PM Post #105
The Red Queen Posts: 4,686 Group: Admin Member #3 Joined: September 6, 2007 Favourite Outsiders Character Dallas Winston Favourite Outsiders Character Angela Shepard Fanfiction.net Username Artemis_Rex	Actually, I recently finished a chapter for H&E that has a flashback to Ray's childhood. Lemme see if I can lift a paragraph ... "Besides, it wasn't like they had anything important to teach him. He didn't give a shit about intergers. Even at twelve years old, he knew they'd given him up as a bad job. He wasn't worth bothering over. He would show them. Sometimes, lying in his cold, hard bed, twisted to avoid the springs jabbing through the mattress, he dreamed of it. He lived just to someday show them all. He would do whatever he had to do to survive; whatever it took. ... For the first, last and only time in his life, Raymond Roth fainted."
	Go, then; there are other worlds than these. If, at his counsel, I should turn aside into that ominous tract which, all agree, hides the Dark Tower. Yet acquiescingly I did turn as he pointed: neither pride nor hope rekindling at the end descried, so much as gladness that some end might be.


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