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rileysmomma	Jun 6 2009, 05:55 PM
Gang Leader Posts: 1,897 Group: Senior Member Member #317 Joined: July 27, 2008 Favourite Outsiders Character Tim Shepard Favourite Outsiders Character Darry Curtis Fanfiction.net Username RileysMomma	Just read it. Found one tiny little thing that ought to be fixed but it's nothing major. “Curly ~~got~~ broke his arm after you got hauled in. Fell of a fucking telephone pole,” The word "got" should be deleted for the sentence to make sense and "of" should be "off". Or, if casual speech is the goal, try something like: “Curly got his arm broke after you got hauled in. Fell off a fucking telephone pole,” But aside from that, it was nice to see an exchange between Dallas and Tim. Edited to add: And I have left a review as well. Edited by rileysmomma, Jun 6 2009, 06:01 PM.
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