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| Topic Started: Sep 8 2011, 04:12:30 PM (3,245 Views) | |
| TheFinalEnigma | Oct 10 2011, 08:24:51 AM Post #196 |
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Wait Vidguy, let's pretend it is and keep him out of it. |
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| TheBurrowingHippo | Oct 10 2011, 08:27:59 AM Post #197 |
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Shady Dude Doing God Knows What in the Corner
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That... would not be kind. YOU DARE DEFY THE ELEMENTS OF HARMONY? |
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| TheFinalEnigma | Oct 10 2011, 08:35:29 AM Post #198 |
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It would only be a small prank. Pinkie Pie would approve of me. |
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| TheBurrowingHippo | Oct 10 2011, 08:37:56 AM Post #199 |
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Alright, fine. *grumble* |
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| TheFinalEnigma | Oct 10 2011, 08:38:57 AM Post #200 |
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And you would be defying the element of laughter. |
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| TheBurrowingHippo | Oct 10 2011, 08:42:16 AM Post #201 |
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TO MANY ELEPHANTS TO FOLLOW Wat |
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| SoulofHachi | Oct 13 2011, 11:32:28 AM Post #202 |
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Steve, so I looked at your writing. Despite not caring about the pony thing, I think it was pretty well written. I like how you describe Discord being filled in with color like a coloring book. But at that same point, I also had difficulty imagining how he would look as you also described him as squiggly lines that reached out. I couldn't decide if he was 2-d or 3-d. Now, not knowing this Celestia, I couldn't really feel concern for her situation. You're writing for fans of that show, so I'm sure you don't have to change anything there, but as an outsider, I don't really feel a bond yet with Celestia, why I should care for her well being. But, that might just be because I'm not the friendliest of person anyways. On the flip side, I am impressed with Discord. I think you gotten him to be believable as a malicious prankster. Despite the criticism, I will be waiting to see what you got next. I think that's pretty good that you can write a story that's interesting even to someone who isn't a fan of the show. |
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| Steev | Oct 13 2011, 12:26:39 PM Post #203 |
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Thanks, hachi! Yeah, a few people commented on how Discord was hard to picture in their heads, but I wanted the situation to seem surreal which is why I left out those details. |
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| SoulofHachi | Oct 13 2011, 12:38:25 PM Post #204 |
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Forgot to add this. I'm sure I don't feel any concern for Celestia at the moment since you've only just started. But as it goes on I'll be able to know her better and sympathize with the situation. |
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| Steev | Oct 13 2011, 12:47:04 PM Post #205 |
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Well, I don't know if you read the second chapter or not, but there's more in there. |
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| Lordraymond | Oct 13 2011, 02:20:49 PM Post #206 |
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So... WHY HAVEN'T THEY SENT MY DAMNED FIC TO THE PREREADERS YET????? GAWSH |
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| Steev | Oct 13 2011, 02:27:52 PM Post #207 |
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Maybe because it's terrible. |
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| Lordraymond | Oct 13 2011, 02:33:52 PM Post #208 |
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Maybe because you should shut your whore mouth, Steve. Your's is... Um... It's... FUCK I CAN'T FIND ANYTHING BAD TO SAY ABOUT IT |
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| TheFinalEnigma | Oct 13 2011, 04:38:29 PM Post #209 |
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Your's is so good it's too good. See Ray, say something like that. |
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| Axem Red | Oct 13 2011, 04:39:21 PM Post #210 |
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Some shit takes time man. How long have you been waiting? |
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