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| Akai Yume (red Dream); UPDATED JUNE 17TH | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Dec 25 2004, 04:11 AM (1,182 Views) | |
| Sinia | Dec 25 2004, 04:11 AM Post #1 |
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I can save the Universe with a kettle and some string, and look
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Umm, my last one didn't work out so well so this is a brand new Fic. It takes place somewhere during G-Rev. A whole bunch of different members are all at Tyson's hous, like Lee, Ray, Mariah, Kai, Yuriy, Tyson, Hilary, Kenny, Hiro, Mr. Granger, Max, and Emily. I have no clue where this concept came from, but hey, who's arguing? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Chapter 1: Hajime Mashite Kai jumped over the wall. "Kai? What in the-" Kai shoved his hand over Yuriy's mouth. "Shut up!" he hissed, "I don't want everyone to know-" "Know what?" Asked another voice from behind. "Great. First Yuriy, now Ray....." Muttered kai under his breath. "I'm going out for a while and I may not be back until later." He said in hurry, "Where?" Questioned Yuriy. "To kami forsaken Voltaire's lab....." Kai never called Voltaire 'Grandfather', knowing he would have been hurt if he did. "What? Why Kai?" Was all Yuriy could hardly manage to say. "I've been going there since we all got back," He stopped; Kai wasn't willing to say more. "Tell me why!" Said Yuriy through clenched teeth. "He's forcing another person to...." He stoppped knowing that the neko-jin and the once cyborg understood what he meant. "You're kidding me! Right Kai?" asked the humanoid cat. Kai merely shook his head indicating he wasn't playing. 'When I went home, I found a lot of his old papers with the plans to make the perfect blader. When I read one or two, I found the address of the building they're using to practice and 'perfect' in." "That is not right!" Growled Yuriy, still angry about his past with Voltaire. "I wanted to go check on the person tonight." he told them, "What's his name?" Asked Yuriy, "From what I've heard, I believe it's Akira." Kai had never really seen this Akira, but he'd heard alot of him. "Kai, we're coming too." Said Ray. "That's what I was fearing. But if you do, be quieter than mice and stealthier than hunter watching it's prey. Got it?" he asked and the others nodded. "Good, c'mon." The dark boy said as he turned and started down the street. They were at the building; it looked like any other bulidng on the street. Most worked here as a study lab on new beyblade parts and different techniques, but come down into the 'basement' and you'll find a whole other new world. Kai, Yuriy, and Ray approached the building with caution. "How're we getting in?" Asked Ray. Kai had moved away from them, "Kai? Hey, uh.... KAI?" Ray said raising his voice slightly. "I'm right here." He said from an alley. Ray and Yuriy followed him into the alleyway. "How are we getting in?" Ray repeated. "Through here?" Questioned Yuriy as he pointed to a door. Kai merely tapped his foot, waiting. "Will you two shut up and c'mon already?" Said Kai angrily. Ray and Yuriy looked at one another and sweatdropped; 'Kai is Kai' was the thought in their heads at that moment. As they entered through the door, they dropped a good ten to fifteen feet. Kai went first and landed with ease. Next came Ray and he landed on his feet like all cats do. Yuryi came last and landed just as easily as the first two. "Whi-" Was all Yuriy could say before they heard the sounds of a bey battle. The three bladers moved towards the railing and saw something unexpected. A blade was beeing attacked repeatedly by about twenty other blades. "C'Mon! Control the bitbeast like you do all the rest!" Yelled Boris as he watched a girl blade. She looked about 15 and very exauhsted. One blade was covered in something red, blood; upon looking her more closely, it looked as though the blade had shredded up her arm. A long, bloody cut ran from her shoulder to her wrist. She looked to be in alot of pain, for everytime she moved slightly, she would wince and bite her bottom lip. But she was still going, "ZEPHYR!" She called as half of the blades surrounded her blade. A blinding light-blue light erupted from the blade as a bitbeast emerged. It was a huge red snake with bright yellow bat wings. "Zephyr ATTACK!" She commanded and the beast attacked. It attacked once and then roared as it was sealed back again. Her blade stopped spinning. "What?! Child do you know how much trouble you're in now?!" Yelled an enfuriated Boris. The girl was panting on all fours as though she couldn't speak another word, let alone have the energy to control a bitbeast. "What happened?" Boris growled, grabbing her red-black hair. "Ah, I have trouble... using my abilities more than.... once in a day." She told him as she continued to breath heavily. Boris yanked her head back with her hair and said through clenched teeth, "Well, that's just too bad! Because one day of unfinished training, leads to double the training tomorrow." He threw her head from his hands and strode away a few steps, "Go to your room. When I come to check in ten minutes, you better be asleep, Akira." She nodded and stood up. They watched her walk through a door on the other end of the room, as Boris went over to a computer. The boys were so angered at the moment. "Computer, stop all blades." He told the computer in a clear voice. "Yes, Mr. Boris." It replied as all the blades stopped spinning. Boris then walked away through a differrent door. "He is a she?" Kai, Ray, and Yuriy went down to the training area and walked through the door she had. "So far, so good. But no security? Heh, Voltaire was always a fool." Said Yuriy as he followed the others thorugh the hall looking at the doors. "Which is it?" Asked Ray, "I don't know." Said Kai plainly. Kai turned his head quickly; he'd heard movement. "Hey Yuriy, I think you were wrong." Ten blades shot out at them. "Please this is easy." Said Yuriy. "No, but they know we're here." Said Kai, "Kai, if we find the girl, what are we going to do?" Questioned Ray. "Considering they know that we're here and know where they are hiding, I think we should take her with us." Both Ray and Yuriy looked at Kai stunned. He gave them a glare and said through clenched teeth, "Yuriy, would you honestly want another to go through what we did?" Yuriy looked down and growled, "Never. Kai you find her and Ray and I shall take care of any unwanted company." Kai merely turned and looked at the doors; all of them looked the same. Behind him, Kai heard Ray say, "Kai hurry, everytime we take one down, five more take it's place!" Kai looked at one more door; it was a shiny, metalic steel color. He had a feeling she was in there. Kai opened the door and walked in. The room was dark with only the moon giving any kind of lumination. He heard a sharp intake of breath. Looking towards the source of the sound he found the girl. She was shaking and seemed to draw back to any sounds he made, as though they would be something to punish her. He moved closer to her and crouched down next to the bed she lay on. "Hey," He said. The girl's eyes flew open and she forced herself back. "Calm down, I'm not going to hurt you." He said calmly and he stood. "Why.. why are you here? Do you know what Voltaire would do to you if he-" Kai had placed his hand over her mouth, he heard footsteps. "Kai! We need to get out now! Boris is coming with kami knows how many henchmen!" Said Ray fantically running into the room, "You can't take them?" Asked Kai. "No, these blades, they have razor edges and they seem to want to attack people rather than blades." Kai nodded and turned back to the girl. "Listen, either come with us, or stay and get tortured? You decide." Kai turned and walked a few steps when a hand grabbed his. He turned and looked at her, "Just let me get one thing." She said and Kai nodded. She ran out of her room and across the hall. She entered the room for maybe a minute and then emerged. She was holding a crimson, red, and black blade, a crimson and black launcher, and a backpack. "Ready?" Kai asked, she nodded and pocketed her blade and launcher. "I know a short cut, a way around the others." She said as they ran down the halls. "Where?" Asked Ray, "Turn left here and the fifht door on the right. It leads you to a stair case and we can exit throught the main entrance to the buliding." They ran down the hall she said and went through the doors. Running up the stairs they heard the door bang behind them. "They went this way! Send men to greet them up stairs!" Kai cursed uunder his breath and they continued to run. "Hold it!" She said. She pointed to one door; there were two. "The right one! The other one will lead us to the main hall and this one goes right outside!" She said. Kai looked at the door, it was locked. Ray took out his blade and launched it at the door. The lock came flying off. They ran out the door. "We need a fast way back, cause I don't think henchmen in dark alleyways is a lot of fun!" Yuriy said as they ran down the street. They were not waiting for Voltaire to came and catch them. "The subway maybe?" Asked Ray. Kai nodded and they went to the station. "Out clubbing?" Asked the ticket man. Ray and Yuriy rolled their eyes as they took their tickets and boarded the train. It was on the train that Kai noticed her arm was still bleeding. How could he have missed that? he asked himself. "Let me see your arm." Kai said, "It's fine, I'll be okay." She said. "No you won't. Just let me see it." She cautiously moved her arm and let kai examine it. Ray and Yuriy were discussing what they were going to do with her. "Is Akira your real name?" Asked Ray, "No, is Nakira but everyone calss me Akira." She said as she gasped slightly. Kai had run his fingers along the outisde of ehr cut. "That needs to be treated." Kai said as he took off his scarf. Ray's and Yuriy's eyesbrows raised; Kai was atking off his scarf and using it on someone? Kai looked at her and said, "Hold still, it may hurt a little bit." She stood still and Kai wrapped her arm gingerly. He wrapped it tight, but looses enough for mobility. "There, that should be good." He said. She bowed her head and said quietly, "Domo Kai." Ray And Yuriy looked at eachother with eyesbrows raised and almost burst of laughing. Kai grumbled the words "shimatte", "baka", and "wait till we get home" under his breath making the other two shut up immediantly. Akira was looking out the windpw at the world city passsing by. Kai looked at her and wondered why she was like that; why was she so quiet and distant?, he wondered. "Is that Zephyr?" Asked Kai. "No, it's Dreza, my original blade. When they first started me, I was using Dreza. But when they found out I could control bitbeasts that weren't mine, they started to train me with different beasts." She replied in a tired tone. "Do you have a bitbeast?" Asked Ray, "No. But I got my hands on someone else's bitbeast and the next thing I know they're doing tests on me....." She stopped and sighed. The boys didn't want to push further, plus they were at their stop. When they entered Tyson's home, everyone was all over them. "Where were you?" "We were worried!" "Is somethign wrong?" "Who is she?" "Shut UP!" yelled Yuriy angered and getting a migrain. "But, who is she?" Questioned Ozuma, "Oh my Kami, what hppened to her arm?" Asked Mariah. Kai saw Nakira move back slightly. He turned and looked at her. "It's ok... they're allies." The others sweatdropped as he said that. She nodded and walked forth. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Okay, I'm tired and I'm done the first chapter! |
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| Aikirau | Dec 25 2004, 06:14 PM Post #2 |
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[- forever yours -]
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That was awsome and very long ^^ When I get the time i'll print it out... and when the others are on here I will also print those out XD I suggest for all to read this! Keep up the good work Nakira! |
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| Tanya | Dec 25 2004, 07:21 PM Post #3 |
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[¤ Absolutely Lovely ¤]
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Really cool!!!But very long XD next time do a thing shorter XD lols But it's really cool
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| Sinia | Dec 25 2004, 07:24 PM Post #4 |
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I can save the Universe with a kettle and some string, and look
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HEY! It's the first chapeter! and its going to be long! heh heh hehe! |
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| Jon | Dec 25 2004, 07:42 PM Post #5 |
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that is....awsome...!!! |
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| Ray the White Tiger | Dec 25 2004, 09:52 PM Post #6 |
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I'm sorry I didn't post before, Narika! But this is like it's writen by Rowling! A few flaws in the character's speaking, though... 10/10! |
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| Sinia | Dec 25 2004, 11:24 PM Post #7 |
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I can save the Universe with a kettle and some string, and look
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Hey, umm chapter 2! its call Momemtai (sp?) This part includes Kai, Yuriy, Hilary, Kenny, Lee, Tyson, Ray, Max, Mariah, and Hiro. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Come her and let me see your arm. I'm Mariah." Said the pink-freak girl. Nakira said in a shy voice, "I'm Nakira." Mariah tilted her head to the side slightly, while Hilary said, "Don't be shy, we dont bite! Now let me get the First Aid kit and Hiro." Mariah looked at the girl and said, "C'mon, while I take a look at your arm. Hilary can tell you who is who." Nakira followed Mariah across the room and sat down next to the girl, while Hilary came running up and handed Mariah the First Aid kit, "Grandpa told me Hiro was in the shower and would be done soon." "Who wrapped your arm up first?" Asked Mariah, now making Kai sorry he did it. "Kai. It's his scarf." The room went quiet for a second and then erupted back to its normal volume. "Ok," Said Hilary. "The one with the hat is Tyson. The one with the yellow-greenish shirt is Lee. Um, Max has the blonde hair, and Yuriy is the one with red hair. Ray, is the one that had the wrap in his hair, you already know Kai. Oh, Kenny has the glasses and I'm Hilary." Akira nodded and made a mental note of who was who. Tyson hearing all of Hilary's introductions said, "Yeah, but Hilary you forgot! You're the one who talkes alot!" Some of the people around the room laughed. Hiro walked in and spotted the newcomer. "So who's the new cute face?" He asked in a teasing tone. "She's Akira, can we call you Akira?" Asked Hilary; Akira nodded. "And her arms injured." Hiro sat down next to her and unwrapped Kai's scarf from it and bandaged it back up; using certain care to make sure it was clean and ok. "How did it happen in the first place?" he asked. Akira went quiet and looked away. "Akira, what-. Is everything alright?" He asked concerned. She shook her head and silent tear ran down her cheek. "Nakira! What's wrong? Tell us!" Begged Hilary. Kai stood up and walked towards her. "Move." He said as he sat next to her. "What's wrong?" He whispered in her ear. "She shook her head and whimpered. "C'mon, I'm right here." He said. She took a shuddering breath, "Voltaire did it to me, or should I say one of his Volt Blades did." "How did he get a hold of you?" Asked a now curious Yuriy. She but her lip, then continued, "I was abandond at birth, and somehow Voltaire got his hands on me. When I was five or six i was forced to be trained under Voltaire and Boris. I can control bitbeast that aren't my own and they thought that was amazing. I was constantly under tests and when I couldn't complete the tasks they wished me to do..." She broke off and shook her head. "What did he do?" Asked Lee now feeling anger burn inside him. "I would get beaten for anything I did wrong, no matter how small the mistake." With more tears rolling down her cheeks, she shook and cried silently. Akira bit her lip to stop any sobs and squeezed her eyes shut. She felt two strong arms wrap around her and hold her close; it was Kai. Everyone watched with wide eyes as the dark adolescent held the crying girl to his body. "Nakira, it's ok.." He said letting his voice trail off; Akira lost control in his arms and sobbed into his chest. Kai's eyes were shaded and it was hard to tell what he was feeling, or thinking, at the moment. He just held her and let her cry in his arms. Akira didn't know Kai's usual demeaner, so this didn't seem odd to her. It was so odd and yet calming to see the scene. Kai, who never really showed any emotion, comforting Akira, an emotional girl who needed love and affection. Akira's tears eventually came to a stop and she was still in his arms. They could see her eyes open. She just sat in his arms as a child would after a nightmare in a parent's arms. Kai moved his arms away and she pulled back. "Akira, come with me." Said Mariah softly helping the girl up and leading her to the girls' room. "I think we should all go to bed." Said Hiro standing up and making ushering movements with his arms. They boys went to the boys' room and got ready for bed. Upon getting out of his day clothes and into night ones, kai crossed to the girls' room and knocked on the door. "Come in." He heard Mariah say. Kai slid the door and walked through. Hilary was reading a book, and Mariah was braidin Nakira's long black hair. Nakira turned to look at him with her pretty grey-green eyes. "Everything alright?" He asked as Mariah finished braiding her black hair and Nakira nodded. Nakira's skin was pale; it made the moon dark in comparison. Her ebony, silken locks must have dragged the floor it was so long. Her eyes were an extremely pale green. Miariah was wearing her usual nightgown and Hilary was wearing a her t-shirt, pj pants outift. When he looked upon Nakira's attire he blinked a few times in surprise. She was wearing a big, white button down shirt and a pair of grey short-shorts. "I'm gonna go before Hiro finds me out of my room." Nakira yawned and said, "Goodnight Kai." He looked at her and nodded, "I'll see you in the morning." Was all he said. With that he turned and went into the boys' room. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Okay, I'm hungry and I need food. Be back laters! |
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| nessi | Dec 26 2004, 01:09 AM Post #8 |
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Kai's OOC. And you should more paragraphs (sp?) because it is kinda confusing when there's dialogue. But otherwise, nice fic.^^ Keep up the good work. |
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| Ray the White Tiger | Dec 27 2004, 12:32 AM Post #9 |
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Excellent addition! Keep it up! |
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| Sinia | Dec 27 2004, 01:10 AM Post #10 |
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I can save the Universe with a kettle and some string, and look
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GAH! What is wrong with my fic? Kai is not OOC, he's acting strange because she's someone who went through the same hardships with Voltaire as he did! I was making him a little understanding, considering she's been through what he has! |
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| crisia | Dec 27 2004, 02:36 AM Post #11 |
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if you write a story...and someone says something bad about it... you should need to appreciate it cause maybe they are right... and nessi is kinda right...think about it!. good fic. |
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| King of Darkness | Dec 27 2004, 12:10 PM Post #12 |
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The suggestion nessi gave about the paragraphs would be a good idea. Apart from that, I really like the story, although it's weird to see Kai acting this way. I look foward for the next chapter. ^^ Update soon! |
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| Tanya | Dec 27 2004, 05:40 PM Post #13 |
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[¤ Absolutely Lovely ¤]
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Same here.What nessi said is true^^; But anyway,i'm loving the story^^ |
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| Sinia | Dec 27 2004, 05:40 PM Post #14 |
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I can save the Universe with a kettle and some string, and look
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Ok, good news. 1. Kai acts normal in next chapter (still in making) and 2. The paragraphs are in paragraph form to your liking; oh great Masters! It takes me forever, but who cares! Umm, the next chapter should be done tonight or tomorrow morning. |
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| flame_s | Dec 27 2004, 05:52 PM Post #15 |
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/+''^ the only person.
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I love your fic^^. Keep it up, it's very intresting to read
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