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My First Book; Hope it actually works...
Topic Started: Nov 6 2004, 12:21 AM (82 Views)
Neia
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This is my first actual story.It is placed in the year 2074. It is very complicated, so here are some bios.


Black Paranoia
By N-T

Characters:

Ronin
Age: 16
Sex: Male
DOB: May 20, 2058
Nationality: Swiss
Personality: Psychotic
Hair: Red
Eyes: Gray
Height: 6’0
History: Ronin is the strongest of the Eric clan’s children. Ever since the Decade of Down, the clan has been infected with a deadly chromosome. This has made it hard for the family to mix with others socially. Born with special defects, the Eric family is the only user of the Black Moon. But when the government attacks the clan and kills them off, Ronin is the last one surviving along with his little sister. In a freak accident, he murders his sister and is permanently disarrayed and crazy. He lives in this world loving him alone. But when the mysterious disease appears, and he starts to have major reactions to it, it is a question of how long he’ll live.

Aidan
Age: 13
Sex: Female
DOB: December 15, 2061
Nationality: Native American
Personality: Renegade
Hair: Black
Eyes: Dark grey
Height: 5’1
History: Aidan is a renegade Neo-NatAm. She is part of the last remaining Native Americans and having nothing fuels her rage. She riots against the LEGION and is on their files for terrorism and possession of unknown weapons as 2nd in Command of the secret organization NEO. In a surprise invasion of the LEGION’s European HQ, Aidan encounters Ronin and soon starts to have vivid nightmares. And she is now starting to remember things that she doesn’t know if they happened and the disease is eating away at her.


Akilina
Age: 14
Sex: Female
DOB: March 7, 2060
Nationality: Irish
Personality: Cheerful
Hair: Dark brown
Eyes: Blue
Height: 5’1
History: Akilina used to go to school until it was closed down because of attacks in the region on students. She was sent to Japan as a student and refugee from Ireland in hope for a better future. She accidentally met Ronin in school and started to be suspicious of him when she caught him ‘playing with fire’. When she meets a quiet girl in a café who whispers of a black moon and murder among the stars, she starts to befriend her but is cautious. Then learning about the disease, she tries to keep Aidan from losing it.



Marco:
Age: 15
Sex: Male
DOB: February 13, 2059
Nationality: American
Personality: Trustworthy
Hair: Dirty blond
Eyes: Hazel
Height: 5’8
History: Marco is an adopted child from America into a respected Japanese family. Marco is Akilina’s best friend and companion. He is among the best in the school, and when it’s information you need, ask him. Marco joins Akilina in the search for the answers to Aidan’s ramblings, but when he bumps into Ronin and asks the wrong question, gains a miniature version of the disease.



Aaron
Age: 14
Sex: Male
DOB: July 8, 2060
Nationality: Italian
Personality: Sweet
Hair: Light brown
Eyes: Green
Height: 5’6
History: Aaron is another member of NEO, and is Tobias’ unrelated little brother. He is relied on for confusion of enemies and sneaking around. He has been looked after by his mother and grandmother after his father left him and his mother for another woman.



Tobias
Age: 17
Sex: Male
DOB: April 1, 2057
Nationality: English
Personality: Humorous
Hair: Dyed Green
Eyes: Purple
Height: 6’3
History: Tobias is 1st in Command of NEO. He is the descendant of a peace maker who died in war. He has no relatives we know of, but it is hinted he and Akilina are related. He looks out for Aidan and when she is diagnosed with the disease, he immediately steps up to the plate to fight in her place also.



Li Jun
Age: 12
Sex: Female
DOB: September 3, 2062
Nationality: Chinese
Personality: Shy
Hair: Black
Eyes: Black
Height: 4’10
History: Little Jun is the child of a runaway Chinese family. She is very shy and worried about every little thing. After meeting Aidan, she begins to respect her and admire her, so when she is diagnosed, Jun is always there. But later on, Jun will meet a sad fate.



Anita
Age: 12
Sex: Female
DOB: May 10, 2062
Nationality: American
Personality: Outspoken
Hair: Blue
Eyes: Orange
Height: 4’11
History: An exchange student from America to experience modern Japanese life, she becomes great friends with Jun.



Sasha
Age: 10
Sex: Male
DOB: June 5, 2064
Nationality: French/ German
Personality: Quiet/ Prankster
Hair: White
Eyes: Blue
Height: 4’10
History: Sasha is a childhood friend of Jun. He also meets Aidan, but jests at her. He met Ronin once and is probably the only one that Ronin wouldn’t automatically hurt.



Hitachi
Age: 26
Sex: Male
DOB: August 6, 2048
Nationality: Japanese
Personality: Lazy/ Genius
Hair: Navy
Eyes: Amber
Height: 6’6
History: An average new Japanese teacher, he teaches Ronin. He realizes Ronin’s problems and tries to help him as much as possible.


Yuri
Age: 19
Sex: Male
DOB: January 29, 2055
Nationality: Russian
Personality: Angst
Hair: Gray
Eyes: Red
Height: 6’0
History: A suicidal teen ready for college. He is a good friend of Tobias and helps with the attacks and riots. But ever since his girlfriend died from cancer, he has been disturbed.


Tamara Jenson
Age: 63
Sex: Female
DOB: October 5, 2009
Nationality: Canadian
Hair: Thin and graying
Eyes: Blue
Height: 5’3
History: Tamara is an elderly lady who moved to Japan after traveling the world. She met Aidan and Ronin on separate occasions and explained to them the differences between everything.


Now here is the story. Tell me if you are confused.

Black Paranoia
By N-T

Chapter 1- I was called Ronin

Ronin sighed and leaned back against the wall. He slid to the ground silently, breathing slowly. He squeezed his hands into fists in frustration and hit the ground beside him. His palms burned. Grinding his teeth together, he dug his nails into his skin, blood seeping through his fingers.
“This pain…this disease…” the words escaped broken and quiet, his deadly whispers deadly to the ear. A pain shot through his veins and he froze unexpectedly. Numb.

Numb.
“Get back! Take the most critically injured and move! Tobias, Section 2 losing morale! 5 men down!” she snapped. She was Aidan.
“Damn, the security is tight here! Something is going on and we need to find out.” A serious voice responded from her earpiece.
“I will tell them prepare for part 2!” the girl whispered back and put her hand behind her back pulling out a gun. She started to fire.
“Phase 2.” she commanded.
“Roger.” a unified chant replied instantly in her earpiece. Ducking behind a wall, she dodged the gun fire. Blood.


Ronin clutched his head, pulling at his messy red hair, grey eyes wide in insanity and rage.
“Yes, Tyra… this pain is eating away at me. Oh, no? The disease? Blood…. Oh … don’t worry, kid, I’ll get you some. And I’ll rip them apart…yeah, and smash them…” he mumbled to himself, speaking to someone who wasn’t there. He clutched his body and squeezed as the pain started to increase. His body burned, his back screaming. He snapped at himself, cursing at the person who wasn’t there.
The person who wasn’t there.
He staggered to his feet leaning against the wall and swaying upright looking at the ground. Ronin clenched his fists and relaxed them again and again, hungry for the sight of blood spilt mercilessly.
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It look very good^^ Nice begining I like it a lot.
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