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Comment Thread; In Mortis est Gloriam
Topic Started: Feb 1 2008, 06:47 AM (873 Views)
ShinobiGhost
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OK as usual this is the thread for comments and anything else you feel like posting about my new fanfic. Be patient as chapter 3 will be close to a week before its out.

Hope everyone enjoys.

Jeremy "GhostKing" Taylor
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Kakashiandme
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First of all...I can't believe you put your name on the thread. You goof!!

Okay, now that I got to re-read it again. I found a few things. Nothing major. Just lots of run-on sentences. I had to stop and mentally add commas and periods. But, in all, I knew what you were saying...so it really wasn't a problem. You might want to embellish some of your descriptions....again, not really a major problem. Some of the descriptions were just a wee bit plain.

I really love reading your stories. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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Ben_Adams
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Hey I finally got round to reading it.
It's really good!
I think I speak for all of us when I say "Bring on chapter 4!"
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Kakashiandme
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Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!

This was a really good chapter. No! That is an understatement.....an AWESOME chapter!! I'm so impressed. There were so many good points!! Even a few descriptions that I really loved that were so focused that I could actually draw in my head. LOL!
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Ben_Adams
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i read through it again cause its good and now that I know what Aoihime is I cant wait for the next chapter.

I wont ruin anything for those of you who havnt worked out who Aoihime is...

BRING ON CHAPTER 4!!
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ShinobiGhost
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LOL, well thanks for the good comments, hopefully I can describe Aoihime just like I picture her in my head. I'll probably start writing sometime today and hopefully be done by monday.
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ShinobiGhost
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Just letting everyone know, my next chapter is coming along nicely but I got a good idea for where to go with it so its going to take me alittle bit longer to get done, just bear with me people. I should be able to get it done by tomorrow sometime.
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Kakashiandme
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I can only bear so long.....this is worse than childbirth! LOL!
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Kakashiandme
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That was really good. Remember though, you don't have to describe what most of us already know...like shikai and bankai...unless you wanted to explain to the ghostly newcomers at the site. That to us Bleach regulars is monotonous. But it was good that you were trying to describe it.

And crap...I forgot to send a past history on Chikara. Damn a doodle!!! LOL! Am I still able to send one?
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ShinobiGhost
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Well I actually had some people tell me they liked the story but would understand it a bit more since they don't watch Bleach. So small intricasies like that I felt neccesary to explain, hell even some people who watch the show may have never thought about any of it like that. And I also had to explain it much in the way a real Suisen would have had to explain it to Lily if the issue ever came up. =) but thanks for the feed back, hope it was worth the wait.
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Kakashiandme
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That's what I thought. Bleach can get confusing. Hell I'm still learning all the damn espada names and numbers...so confusing.
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Ben_Adams
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Yet another great chapter.

BRING ON CHAPTER 5!!!

thats right... it never ends...
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ShinobiGhost
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Started writing chapter 5, without any major hits of writers block I should be done around monday or tuesday
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Oh cool! Don't fail us now!!
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Kakashiandme
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Oh Wow! I just read your fanfic! Wow! Wow! Wow! I'm so into this........I can't wait for more!!
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