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Called to Serve
Topic Started: Mar 24 2013, 09:46 PM (9,872 Views)
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Machiko has Ranma's sperm than to?


I'm thinking so too. Machiki is probably related to the Emperor somehow. Maybe she should marry Ranma since they seem to genuinely like each other (at least as friends).
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Yeah, I've got her pegged as the emperor's grand daughter as well. They do get on well, so maybe something will come of it in the end - although it seems any romantic attachments are leaning towards Nabiki. Three of em raising their kiddies together or playing with them in Ranma's mothers backyard could rate some 'daww' moments.
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I've seen this kind of writing before, primarily in round-robin style stories where clear elements of the plot are deliberately not disclosed so as to leave them open to allow the story to be taken in a different direction by another writer...unfortunately, this is not a round-robin story.

Is Machiko going to be carrying Ranma's child? The reader is left to speculate on this, as it was never specified as to whose seed was being used and only obliquely alluded to be an, again, unspecified individual's. There are hints in the storyline that Machiko would be impregnated with Ranma's seed, but nothing to actually confirm it. Machiko may even believe that she is to carry Ranma's child, but due to the duplicitous nature of the one's in control of the situation...she may not be.

Is Ranma going to be impregnated with the Emperor's seed? There is nothing in the story to indicate that the Emperor has any involvement with what's going on in the story other than having endorsed the SIS act. For all the reader knows, the Guiding Hand (or Garuda, acting on his own initiative) could be planning to impregnate Ranma with the seed from anyone (including Ranma's own, as one could even speculate, based on how the one known acquisition of Ranma's seed took place...that a previous sample had been acquired at an earlier time and just wasn't mentioned yet).

Is Machiko related to the Emperor of Japan? Unknown; all that is known is that she is the granddaughter of someone influential enough to see to it that she has her own security detail on hand, in addition to whatever security is provided by the SIS, and to conduct clandestine medical procedures at Campus Five. And that Machiko has been raised to be very dutiful and obedient to her grandfather's wishes (in other words, her upbringing has likely been even more closely monitored and controlled than Ranma's).

Is Shampoo now carrying Ranma's child? Unknown, but the reader can speculate that it is the case...if Cologne herself wasn't in error in identifying the seed sample she was provided (but for all the reader knows, Garuda may have had a means of misrepresenting the samples true origin...and I don't recall him specifying that the sample actually was Ranma's).

In short, Coengar2 appears to be going out of the way to keep as many of the plot elements of the story open to reinterpretation as possible...which really isn't all that bad of an idea, if you're in the process of writing a draft for a potential story and have yet to decide on how you intend the story to conclude or which elements of the plot will have any real bearing on the story to reach a specific conclusion.

Leaving elements of the plot vague and indistinct in order to create a sense of mystery is an accepted means of writing and quite understandable...if not overdone by applying it to everything in a story so that every element of the story can be turned into its own little mystery within a mystery and all but guarantees some reader dissatisfaction as they become so lost in the multitude of little mysteries that the primary mystery becomes indistinct and unimportant to them. And if the writer should fail to resolve all those little mysteries they worked so hard to incorporate into their story...
Edited by Tai Khan, Apr 17 2013, 02:00 PM.
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PART NINETEEN



It was three days after Machiko's procedure and she and Ranma were spending some time in the community hall just sitting and talking.

"Ranma,why do you keep staring at my stomach?" Machiko asked.

"I'm watching your ki flows and sensing your baby." Ranma replied.

"Sensing my baby? Ranma,i only had my procedure three days ago,surely you can't tell anything."

Ranma shook her head "No really I can. I've been studying using Ki to scan a body to figure out things like broken bones,or overall health and such stuff and I can see the little ball of ki in your stomach where your baby is."

"Can you tell anything else about my baby?" Machiko asked almost sounding nervous.

"Well,like you said,it's only been three days so there's not much to tell right now.Only that it's there and it seems like a really strong ki signature for something so young. I bet that in a month or so I can tell you what sex it's gonna be.Heck in a few weeks I could probably tell you who the father is if I knew their ki signature real well."

Machiko looked wide eyed "You can really do that?"

Ranma nodded "Sure,you just need some skill in using your ki."

After a few moments Machiko changed the subject and the two friends kept right on talking.

TWO DAYS LATER

Nabiki made her way down the path from the cafeteria and made her way back to her classroom a look of mild annoyance on her face.

"I don't know why I bother talking to that blond baka." Nabiki huffed to herself as she recalled the conversation she had just had with Haruka during lunch.

From the very beginning Haruka did not hide the fact that she was a lesbian and in a long term relationship.After getting to know Ranma and Nabiki the blond Juuban girl had decided that they were a lesbian couple as well even if it seemed as if they were still in the early stages of their relationship. So Haruka had taken apon herself the role of mentor and constantly gave Nabiki advice and words of wisdom to help guide the new couple down the path of bliss.

"Are you out of your mind?" Nabiki practically screamed out in the middle of the cafeteria "Ranma and I do not have a dominate and submissive relationship."

"Oh really?" Haruka raise and eyebrow "I know you Nabiki,you're a control freak who likes to be in charge and Ranma is always eager to please you and does damn near anything you tell her to. I bet you could ask her to run around the campus naked and she's probably at least consider it if it would make you happy."

Haruka took a drink of juice "Look i'm not saying that you two have some sort of whips and chains thing going on but I bet you could if you wanted it. I just mean that you like to be in charge and she seems to really like doing things to make you happy. Look,it seems like Ranma has a weakness for strong willed women which you just happen to be. You will probably be the one wearing the pants in the relationship is all i'm saying."

Nabiki picked at her food "I just don't think that we would have that type of relationship,i mean you know Ranma,she's pretty independent and headstrong."

Haruka snorted "Yeah, to everyone but you. I mean good grief Nabiki,you asked her to run from the gym back to the dorm because you forgot your yoga mat in your room and you wanted her to get it for you. And she did it."

"Well,she was just being helpful.She'd do it for anyone." Nabiki said.

"I still think that you have more influence over her than you think you do." Haruka took another drink "But you have to admit,you'd look pretty hot in a black leather push up corset and a whip and the thought of a naked Ranma tied spreadeagle on your bed is rather tasty."

Nabiki huffed and went to throw her trash away and left the cafeteria with the sounds of Haruka chuckling behind her.

"There is no way I could be a Dom over Ranma." Nabiki thought as she made her way back to class.

But in Nabiki's mind,thoughts of her time as the Ice Queen came filtering up.She had been in control of people she had made them dance to her will and wishes and she liked it. The Ice Queen got what she wanted when she wanted it and people did as she told them. No she knew in her heart that if given the chance,the Ice Queen would take advantage of Ranma and mold her into the perfect plaything.

"No." Nabiki shook her head "I don't have to be the Ice Queen anymore,i don't need her or want her. With the investments I have set up and the interests that they are paying plus the monthly stipend i'll get from the SIS for having a baby I don't need the money anymore. I can stop being the Ice Queen and just be Nabiki again no more using people."

Thoughts of a red haired girl and a black haired boy filled her head "And Ranma has been used by too many people in his life anyway,if I really want a chance with him,i need to just be Nabiki from now on.No more scams or photos no more blackmail. I'm going to have a baby in a few months,i'm going to be going off to college and hopefully i'll be in a good relationship someday. Nabiki,it's time to grow up and get away from the old you and bring out the new you."

"But it won't be easy." Nabiki thought to herself as she walked towards her class. The image of a naked tied Ranma still floated in her head every so often.

Finally,Nabiki was able to lose herself in her school work and rather hentai images finally stopped popping into her head at random intervals. After her class was over she headed back to her dorm and apon entering her room she found Ranma sitting on her bed,a letter clutched in her hand and tears on her cheeks.

"Ranma,what's wrong?" She asked with concern fearing more bad news from home.

Ranma looked up,her blue eyes filled with sadness "Machiko left the campus and went home."

"Machiko left?"was all Nabiki could say.

Ranma nodded as she held up the letter "She said that since her procedure was over and that she was pregnant her grandfather wanted her back home where her family doctors could watch over her."

Nabiki walked over to Ranma's bed and sat down pulling the sad girl into a close embrace.

"I didn't even get to say goodbye." Ranma sniffed.

Nabiki softly stroked Ranma's hair "I'm sorry Ranma that she is gone.We always knew that we would go back home after we completed the program. We can't stay here forever you know."

"Yeah I know. But she just had her procedure,i thought we were suppose to stay here for our first trimester at least."

"Well.it seems like her family had other plans. I'm sure you'll hear from her again."

"Yeah, she left me her name and address so that we could write each other." Ranma showed Nabiki the letter.

Nabiki's eyes went wide as she read the name and address "That's Machiko's family name?"

Ranma shrugged "I guess so."

"Ranma,that's the name of the Imperial family." Nabiki was stunned. Ranma's friend was the granddaughter of the Emperor.

"So Machiko is someone important then?" Ranma asked.

Nabiki nodded "Very important."

"That's cool I guess." Ranma replied as she snuggled closer into Nabiki's embrace "She's always gonna be just Machiko to me."

A week went by and the shock of Machiko's lineage wore off. Things went back to a normal routine as the girls of dorm three finished their first three months on Campus Five. The monthly logbooks about their menstrual cycles were turned in to Aya to be handed over to the medical staff to help in scheduling times for their procedures.

Ranma was currently in her anatomy class being taught pressure points by Master Yamada.

"Sensei,do I really need to learn these?"Ranma almost whined "They are so embarrassing."

Master Yamada lightly bopped her student on the head "Do not avoid these student. Someday you may find that the ability to stimulate female arousal and to enhance sexual stimulation with a single touch could be very useful in the future. I'm sure your future spouse will appreciate it at the least."

Master Yamada smiled "Besides,these pressure points are just leading into others that will aid you in manipulating another's emotions without violence."

"But why would I want to do that?" Ranma asked.

"With the points I am teaching you could calm down an enraged or violent person,stop a depressed person from committing suicide. They are very useful in allowing you to override a pain sensation and to bring calm to a person in distress.All very useful things for a healer to know."

"Still don't know about this being a doctor thing." Ranma mumbled "I mean,all always I've been told is that I would be running a dojo when I finished school no one ever said anything about being a doctor."

"Ranma,you have a natural skill and talent for the healing arts.It would be a shame to waste it. Besides,a doctor makes considerable more money that a mere dojo master."

Master Yamada patted Ranma on the head "Now remember,there will be no lessons next week as I will be away attending to some very important business, but I will return afterwards. Now,once you master these pressure points i'll teach you one that will produce an erection in a man with a single poke of the finger."

Another light bop on the head soon followed "And don't look at me like that student."

It was late evening as Master Yamada made her way through the medical building,quietly walking the hallways as she made her way to an office. She knocked on the door and at the muffled sound of an 'enter' she opened the door and walked in.

"Ah Master Yamada,thank you for coming." the doctor looked up from her computer.

"It was no problem Dr.Itachi,i needed to speak with you anyway."

"Ranma gave us quite the scare the last couple of weeks ago,almost threw the whole plan out the window."

"You are talking about Ranma's ability to use ki to scan a body." Master Yamada inquired.

"I mean Ranma coming real close to learning that he is the father of Machiko's child." the doctor sighed "Something that the Emperor had requested that he never learn about. We had to move Machiko off campus and away from Ranma before he could put things together."

"Machiko and her child are fine?"

Dr.Itachi nodded "Yes,they are both doing well,Machiko is back home and resting I have been told."

"Very good." Master Yamada said.

Dr.Itachi rubbed her forehead "Hopefully,this ki scanning thing won't cause us anymore problems."

"That depends Doctor,"the aged master replied "Did Gaurada give you a seed to use for Ranma's procedure?"

"Yes he did.I take it this is the thing you wanted to talk to me about?"

"Indeed. May I see the seed. There is something I need to check."

The doctor looked skeptically for a moment before rising up from her chair "Sure, i'll go get it.I'm keeping it in my private fridge."

A few moments later the doctor returned carrying the wooden box that Garuda had given her which she passed over to Master Yamada.

Yamada opened the box and removed the small cylinder inside. She held it up and seemed to stare intently at it for a few moments.

"As I had fear. Garuda you always were a fool."

She then dropped the cylinder to the floor and stepped on it,crushing it under her foot and leaving a small smear of goo on the floor.

Dr.Itachi looked wide eyed in shock at Master Yamada "What are you doing? Garuda said that the Guiding Hand wanted us to use that for Ranma's procedure."

"No Doctor,the Guiding Hand did not authorize Garuda to use his own seed." Yamada answered "He has over stepped his boundries this time. The Guiding Hand will be told of this. He has gone too far."

"But what seed should we use then?"

"Use whatever seed you wish Doctor.It is no longer important."

With that Master Yamada turned and left the room leaving the mess behind for Dr.Itachi to clean up.

"Next week Garuda will make his final move and I will be there to see how it ends. It looks like we will meet again Happi and have I got news for you." Master Yamada smiled as she exited the medical building and made her way through the evening air.
Edited by Coengar2, Apr 29 2013, 08:07 PM.
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NOW we're getting somewhere!

What's Garuda's end game? Still unknown, but it's possible that even if his current endeavors are exposed and prevented that he'll just try again at a later time with a different method.

Machiko's family has now been identified, and there is strong circumstantial evidence to suggest that she is carrying Ranma's child. Nabiki suspected that Machiko came from the upper heirarchy of Japan, she just hadn't guessed that it would be the very top ranks. Funny thing is, by remaining in contact, even if only through letters, there is a chance that Ranma will eventually meet the child he unknowingly fathered.

Still, questions remain; just who's child was Ranma supposed to carry, if not Garuda's or another member of the Guiding Hand? And will a replacement sample be sent for? Yamada doesn't seem to think it's of any real importance. If so, then why was Ranma selected for the program in the first place? Surely it wasn't a random selection, or just to covertly obtain his seed, or solely on Garuda's recommendation. And if Yamada suspected that Garuda was up to no good...why wait until now to do anything about it? What changed? After all, it was Yamada herself that presented the seed sample that was to be used to impregnate Ranma; if she'd suspected Garuda of being up to no good and might switch seed samples, why had she not checked the sample previously? What plan did the Guiding Hand actually have for Ranma and his Art, and what modifications did Garuda attempt to make, or succeed in making, to that plan. And how will it affect Ranma, or her child? And why would Yamada seemingly cast aside the Guiding Hand's plan, simply because she'd found that Garuda had switched the intended seed sample for his own? Surely the entire plan wasn't solely Garuda's idea just to exact some revenge on Happosai? If so, Garuda would have to be the most talented salesman in history.
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Heh. I hope Ranma won't end up carrying Kuno's or Gosunkugi's child.
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Heh. I hope Ranma won't end up carrying Kuno's or Gosunkugi's child.

I seriously doubt either Kuno or Gosunkugi would even make it past the initial stages of the screening process. And while the Kunos are depicted as fairly well-off financially with so-called claims of "nobility", at least in comparison to the majority of Nerima residents, I just don't see them as having anywhere near enough clout to even locate where Ranma and Nabiki are, let alone smuggling in a seed sample for inclusion into the program.

Than again, it would be mildly entertaining to see the Kunos being arrested for attempting to do so.
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PART TWENTY



Dr.Itachi hurridly cleaned up the mess on her office floor and after throwing paper towels she had used away she left in search of the aged master.

She found Master Yamada sitting on a bench just outside of the community building,with a sigh of relief the doctor sat down next to the master.

"I take it that that wasn't the seed that the Guiding Hand wanted us to use for Ranma's insemination." Dr.Itachi stated.

"No,"Yamada shook her head "It wasn't. It seems that Garuda had switched the original sample for his own seed."

'If i may ask,just whose seed was Ranma suppose to receive?"

"The seed of a man named Akira Yamashida." came Yamada's reply.

"Never heard of him." was Itachi's response.

"No,i doubt that you ever have heard of him." Yamada smiled softly "He was a scholar and a philosipher and a master of many martial arts styles. He dedicated his life to using his skills to help those around him. He was a good teacher and a good friend."

Seeing the interest on Itachi's face Master Yamada continued "Akira had no family of his own so when he died a few months ago the Guiding Hand decided to honor his last request to use the seed he had left behind to father a child in the hopes that Akira's many good traits would continue on."

Itachi's face slowly lit up in understanding "You were planning on impregnating Ranma all along weren't you?"

Yamada shook her head "Actually,at first we had simply wanted Ranma to father a child with a girl of our chosing but unfortunately there are many circumstances that could not be controlled while Ranma was still in Nerima,namely all the other girls that his foolish father had dumped on him.We were looking into other women to receive Akira's seed. But then we learned that Ranma had registered for this SIS program as a woman and it was decided that Ranma should receive the seed."

"I don't understand,why Ranma? I mean i can get it that she has special martial arts skills and everything but the Guiding Hand must have gone through a lot of trouble to get all this arranged."

"Indeed we did,just convincing the SIS to accept Ranma's registration for an interview was a hassle.Fortunately when we learned that the Emperor was interested in having his granddaughter enter into the program not only to show the public that even the Royal house was participating in the program but to bring in a shot of fresh blood so to speak into the Imperial bloodline,let's just say that an agreement that suited all parties was made."

Yamada leaned back into the bench as she continued "And as for why Ranma? I am a grandmaster of the Arts,well versed in many techniques and styles as is Garuda and all the members of the Guiding Hand. i am also almost one hundred years old and it has taken me almost all of that time to get where i am now. In fact most of the higher ranking members of the Guiding Hand are rather up there in years. As for Ranma,you were there when she fought three grandmasters at once for over fifteen minutes without breaking a sweat. She has learned to project her ki as a ranged attack,she can generate tornadoes at will, she makes up advanced techniques as she needs them.Her skills and abilities have caught the attention of several rather powerful beings and she is only seventeen. My God,just think of what she will be able to do in five or ten years."

"But i thought that you didn't want Ranma to practice the martial arts? that's why you're teaching her medicine right?"

Yamada chuckled "I seriously doubt that Ranma will ever stop practicing the Arts,it's too much a part of her. No what the Guiding Hand wants,what I want, is for Ranma to stop getting into life or death fights with beings of power. I want her to live a long and healthy life,to perfect her Art and pass it on to the next generation,to marry and have a family and maybe,just maybe,have some happiness in her life. And as i told her,she has a natural flair for medicine and it pays much better than just being a martial arts instructor."

Itachi smiled at Yamada "Sounds like you have a soft spot for her."

Yamada smiled in return "Well,the young whelp does kind of grow on you if you are near her long enough. Doctor,i will be away for the next week on business,if you could,would you have Ranma help you around the medical building so that she can gain some experiance and perhaps see if she truly does want a medical career."

"Sure,i can do that.In fact,we have a new group of candidates coming in next week just starting phase two.An extra pair of hands is always appreciated."

Silence drifted between the two women for a few moments before Dr.Itachi spoke up "I wonder why Master Garuda switched the seeds and what happened to the original one."

"Garuda and the grandmaster of Ranma's style have issues between them that go back a very long time.I'm afraid that Garuda has let them spill over onto Ranma.Something i plan on stopping soon. As for Akira's seed,i plan on finding that out soon as well. If i can recover it in time,i'd like for you to use it for Ranma's procedure.If i can not recover it in time,i ask that you try to at least use a good seed in it's place."

"I will do my best,but as you know,the seeds are from unkown donors."

"Be that as it may,i'm sure that you have at least a couple of special seeds available for certain circumstances." the master smiled.

"Perhaps i might be able to find something lying around."

"Master Yamada,you can do that ki scan thing as well right?"

"I can do that."

"Then why didn't you notice the switched seeds when you gave it to me?"

Yamada sighed "When we first received the seed,i was able to scan it and detect Akira's ki signature. When Garuada gave it to me to give to you i'm afraid that i neglected to scan it again to make sure it was the right seed at the time i had no reason to suspect that it wasn't Akira's seed,i have since learned otherwise."

"Otherwise?"

"I'm sorry Doctor,that is Guiding Hand business and i can not discuss it with you. Now if you'll forgive me i must bid you a good night." with that Master Yamada got up and rapidly walked away leaving the doctor sitting in the pale light of a nearby streetlight.

The week went past and the mood in dorm three was one of nervousness as the girls were chosen to go have thier procedures.Haruka was among the first to go and returned in good spirits and just a bit stiff. By friday it was Nabiki's turn to go.

FRIDAY MIDMORNING-NERIMA

Master Garuda walked down the street heading for the Nekohanten with Master Yamada and Master Hosei at his side.Finally after all these years the master was ready to get his revenge on his hated enemy. As the trio approached the door to the cafe the sound of someone landing behind them caused them to turn around and a voice growled out.

"Well well well,if it ain't Garuda.You and me have a few things to discuss and i promise you,it's going to hurt you a lot." Happosai snarled as his aura began to flicker around him.
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Very nice, very nice. Glad to see the crazy was limited to Garuda.

Now, I'm very much looking forward to seeing Happi lay down some pain.

Also, for whenever Ranma and Machiko meet back up.
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Question I now have is...will Garuda be dismissed from the Guiding Hand before or after his battle with Happosai?

And what's the surprise that Yamada has for Happosai? Could their encounter oh so long ago have proven...fruitful?
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Question I now have is...will Garuda be dismissed from the Guiding Hand before or after his battle with Happosai?

And what's the surprise that Yamada has for Happosai? Could their encounter oh so long ago have proven...fruitful?
You mean like, possibly, an auburn-haired female child who dresses traditionally and has a thing for swords?
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That would be a little obvious...still, she could be their grandchild, I suppose.

But actually, I was thinking more of an OC, for once.
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Greetings Everyone

Sorry for the delay in posting the next section of the story,my computer has been in the shop for repairs.

Just wanted to let you all know that Called to Serve is still an active story (will probably be finished in four or five more sections) as is We Walk in Darkness.

Drastic Measures while still active is a bit lower on the priority scale but i'll try to post something soon.

Anyway,thanks for sticking around and look for the next section of Called To Serve in a day or two

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PART TWENTY ONE


"Well well well,if it isn't Happosai."Garuda sneered "Come to get your butt kicked by a real master of the Art?"

"Sure,if you can find me one."Happosai snarled back causing Garuda to grit his teeth at the old gnomes words "Cause it sure ain't you Garuda.You sucked eighty years ago and i'm pretty certain that you still suck today."

"I'll have you know that i have spent the last eighty years training and perfecting my skills while you just pissed them away stealing panties and groping women."

"Well,at least i spent my time on worthwhile things,"Happosai chuckled "Perhaps if you had chased a girl or two once in a while then perhaps you wouldn't be dying a virgin today."

Garuda growled and began to move towards Happosai but was stopped by a hand on his shoulder.

"Even after all these years you still get upset by his words Garuda."Yamada said then turned to face a surprised Happosai "Hello Happi,it's good to see you again."

"Yamada,is that you?" Happosai softly said "Wow my dear,you got old."

Yamada snorted "And you got short and bald Happi."

Happosai laughed "True,the years have not been as kind to me as they were to you.You still look good Yamada. So why are you still hanging around with this loser anyway?" Happosai nodded his head towards a red faced Garuda.

"We have been working together over the years for the Guiding Hand,Happi."

Happosai nodded as he watched Cologne pogo out of the Nekohanten and come up beside him "So why is the Hand nosing around my heir these days?"

"Your heir?"Garuda yelled out "Like you can teach anyone anything. Look at your so called masters,a lying conman and a weeping wimp.If that is the best you can do you might as well turn Ranma over to the Guiding Hand right now so that he can learn from a real master."

Happosai harumpfed "I never declared Genma and Soun to be masters,they took the title after they sealed me in that cave."

Garuda laughed "Your own students tried to kill you? Too bad they failed at it."

"Be that as it may Garuda,it still doesn't explain why the Hand is so interested in Ranma." Cologne piped up.

"Even you Elder Ku Lon," Master Hosei spoke to the amazon matriarch "Must be able to feel the power that flows through young Ranma. He is much to powerful for one so young. The Guiding Hand is not the only beings that are becoming interested in the stories of Ranma's addventures."

"At first," Hosei continued "The Guiding Hand simply wanted to examine the child,to learn the truth within the stories.I must admit that the Guiding Hand was very impressed at what we discovered. Young Ranma has great potential and may be able to become one of the truly powerful martial artists in the world,should he live that long."

"Live that long?" Cologne asked "Are you saying that Ranma is in danger then?"

Hosei shook his head "Right now,no,not in immediate danger. While it is true that some of those who have started to show an interest in Ranma are not concerned about his well being,only in if they can control or neutralize him,they are currently involved in pursuing other matters of importance to them. Right now Ranma is merely a mild curiousity."

"But if Ranma continues to defeat opponents like Saffron..." Cologne said with a knowing nod of her head.

"Than Ranma will continue to gain greater interest and will contin ue to face stronger and stronger challengers."

Happosai took a puff on his pipe "So that's why you are trying to turn Ranma from a martial artist to a doctor."

Yamada nodded "Yes,we seek to make Ranma a less threatening target of interest,someone unlikely to gain much of a reputation in the martial arts world.Besides,the boy has a natural gift as a healer,it would be a shame to waste it."

Happosai chuckled "It'd pay better too than trying to teach simpletons in a run down dojo like what Genma had planned for him."

Cologne looked at Garuda "But why the scare tactic? Why make Ranma seem like some dangerous monster?"

"Ranma is dangerous," Garuda replied "The nekoken and his father's stupid teachings have made the boy mentally unstable.He can not be allowed to continue to grow stronger,he's a bomb waiting to go off."

Cologne scoffed "Yes,Ranma is dangerous,but then,so am i and so are you and even that blind duckboy in my kitchen is dangerous.We are students and masters of the art of war.By our very natures we are dangerous.No Ranma may be dangerous but he contains his power behind a wall of iron control. I have no fear of Ranma going off on an uncontrollable rampage of destruction.It's not in his nature. He's only dangerous if you give him a reason to be."

"Any other reason the Hand is messing with my student?" Happosai remarked as he took another puff on his pipe.

Yamada nodded "There is another reason."

"Yamada!" Garuda yelled out "Tell him nothing.It is none of his business."

Happosai nodded "This has to do with that SIS nonsense doesn't it?"

"It does."Yamada agreed "The Guiding Hand would like it if Ranma's genetic potential was passed on to a child.A child that Ranma could then pass his martial arts skills too,a child that could have a life without all of the dibilitating burdens that Ranma has had to bear in his life."

"While it is true that Ku Lon's granddaughter now carries a child of Ranma's i expect that the child will be raised in the Amazon traditions."

Cologne nodded "That is true.In fact as of now there is no plans to inform Ranma of the child's existance. Shampoo and i will be returning to the village in a week or two and i doubt if we'll be returning. I do plan to send small groups of Amazons back here to Nerima to run the cafe and to get experiance with the outside world. The fight between Ranma and Saffron has attracted the attention of those in Beijing and i'm sure in a couple of years from now the village may have to relocate from the jusenkyo valley. Perhaps we'll come across the waters to Japan."

Happosai spoke up "With Ranma a girl in this SIS program,you were going to influence her getting pregnant weren't you?"

Yamada nodded "We did have a seed that the Guiding Hand wanted to be used for the procedure."

"And just who would be knocking up my sweet Ranmachan?"

"We gathered a sample from master Akira Yamashida just before he died a few months ago.We were going to use that."

Happosai took another puff and nodded "Yamashida huh? Not a bad choice,a good fighter for an egghead. Sounds like the plan has changed though."

"I recently discovered that Akira's seed has been switched with another seed." Yamada admitted.

"And just who's seed were you going to plant in my student?"

Garuda smiled "Mine you worthless old pervert.Your precious heir will be carrying my child.Your anything goes school will be passed down to my heir.I will have control of your school."

No one saw Happosai move as Garuda stood there gloating. It was only when the man was suddenly launched up into the air by an uppercut did anyone realize that Happosai had launched an attack.

Eighty years ago the two men had faced off in combat.That time it had been over a woman. While Garuda was skilled Happosai was better.Garuda barely had any ki control at the time,his aura was very dim around him.Happosai was a burning beacon of red fury who lit up Garuda like the fourth of July.

In the end it was no contest,wasn't even close. Happosai had left Garuda battered and beaten face down in the dirt clawing at the ground and muttering soft oaths of revenge.

Now eighty years later the two men faced off again.One was fighting for vengence and to prove he was the better fighter and for the other one,it was personal.Garuda had violated a sacred rule by dragging an innocent student into his plan of revenge.

Happosai couldn't care less if Garuda wanted to kill him,he certainly wasn't the first to want that and was probably not going to be the last one either,but the fool had gone off and tried to mess with his student and with his school.It would be a cold day in hell when Happosai would let any spawn of Garuda's learn anything goes.

In the past eighty years,Garuda had been plotting and planning,training and learning trying to improve just so he could be the one to leave Happosai lying in the dirt.He had been waiting for this day for eighty long years.

It wasn't enough,Happosai was still the better fighter,still the master of Ki. Over the years the old gnome had gained a reputation for being petty,vengeful,mean spirited and sadistic even and now he was showing Garuda why he had earned those titles.

It wasn't enough to just beat the fool down,Happosai wanted to hurt him,to humiliate him to make him think twice before even thinking about facing him again.It was more than a beating,it was more than a smack down it was pain pure and simple.

With a kick Garuda's battered body flew across the road and impacted against the side of a building with a sickening crunch. It was only Yamada's hand on his shoulder that prevented Happosai from crossing the road to inflict more harm on the motionless man.

"No Happi,he has had enough.Let it go." Yamada said in a soothing tone of voice.

"Enough? I don't think so."Happosai snarled "You heard him,he's going to impregnate my Ranmachan."

Yamada shook her head "No he won't.I destroyed his seed so it won't be used but i need him alive to find out what he did with Akira's seed.If i can find it in time,i still want to use it with Ranma."

"Oh alright,i'll let him live."Happosai relented grumpily "But i won't like it."

Yamada smiled "Besides,if you kill him you'll go to jail and you'll never get to meet our daughter."

Happosai's eyes widened and Cologne's jaw dropped "Daughter? I have a daughter?"

"No,WE have a daughter,and grandchildren and great grandchildren." Yamada replied still smiling.

"Why didn't you ever tell me you were pregnant.I'd have married you."Happosai insisted.

"Happi,even then i knew what kind of man you were."Yamada said with a sigh "You were a lecherous pervert back than and you still are one today. I would have come to hate you had we stayed together.At least this way i have some good memories and we share something special between us. I'll be by in a few days to give you our daughter's address so you can go meet her if you want."

"I'd like that." Happosai replied.

"Good,now if the Elder would be so kind as to call for an ambulance,i'll get this idiot to a hospital. Hopefully he'll tell me where Akira's seed is."

"And then the Guiding Hand has a few questions for him concerning his behaviour the last few months." Master Hosei said as he bent to check on Garuda "I fear that things are not going to be good for him in the future."

With that Cologne hopped back into the Nekohanten to call the ambulance and Happosai leapt away across the rooftops.

"I hope that Garuda has not done something stupid with Akira's seed."Yamada groused.

"Indeed.I also hope this doesn't interfer with the Guiding Hands plans for Ranma." Master Hosei replied

Yamada nodded "True,Ranma could still become a fine addition to the Guiding Hand in the future,if all goes well."
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Just went back over all the posts, the story and comments, and I have to ask: What's the point of all this? Why the mystery and plots, if neither Ranma nor Nabiki appear to have even the slightest clue that anything is even mildly suspicious about their situation or involvement (and by all appearances never will have any such suspicions as there will be no apparent reason to inform them after the fact except to instill mistrust long after it become pointless and of completely no use)?

If this is intended to be primarily a "next-generation" story, then everything posted so far could have been summarized in a single flashback (or an author's note or prologue to provide the readers with the necessary background information of how the characters got to that point) as there were no significant character introspective elements that weren't glossed over or completely omitted.

And if the story's to be mainly of what occurs after Ranma's pregnant and returned home? Again, a simple flashback, prologue or author's note could provide all of the needed information the reader would require.

I apologize for sounding so negative about everything that has been written so far, but unless you start actually making Ranma and Nabiki actual participants of the mysteries and plots you're introducing and resolving, rather than completely oblivious pawns for others that will never know anything of what occurred except through second-hand stories and long after the fact...I just feel that it's all pointless and needless as it's not likely to have any real affect on what I assumed were the main characters of the story as the time that they could have had any impact on things would have long passed.

In short, Ranma and Nabiki are in the story, but...it could just as easily have been Mutt and Jeff, or Snoopy and Charlie Brown. Ranma and Nabiki are in the story, but they're not actually IN the story! They're portrayed as "side characters" and seemingly of no real importance to whatever the actual story is about and will have little to no impact on anything that occurs, and will never be actual participants of the story itself (except as unknowing pawns in the plots of others). While the reader is presented with an apparent abundance of writing focusing on Ranma and Nabiki, nothing of any real importance to advancing the plot or showing character motivations within the story is focused on or elaborated upon (it's either glossed over or omitted), and are instead presented with mysteries and plots that directly affect the supposed main characters of the story but for which they're completely (and deliberately kept) unaware and unsuspecting of, thus preventing them from having any involvement in them.

I suppose what's really bothering me about the story is that it's as if you're writing two decidedly different stories. They are interconnected, but are being deliberately kept separate from each other. One is the developing relationship between Ranma and Nabiki, and what they're experiencing...but appears to be relatively unimportant to whatever you're main plot is as you omit substantial amounts of introspection and motivation by the characters. While the other is a mystery involving plots and schemes by numerous parties that directly affect Ranma and Nabiki, but for which they have no awareness of or direct involvement with...which, I'm afraid, renders the overall story rather...well...uninteresting.
Edited by Tai Khan, May 15 2013, 10:16 AM.
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