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Topic Started: May 7 2009, 12:56 PM (25,425 Views)
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Funny, but honestly, does every nutjob HAVE to follow them to London?

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It is a ninja's solem duty to combat demonic forces and evil spirits
really made me laugh. I don't think Konatsu knows what a ninja's duty really is :snigger:
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I am having some problem with everyone getting the post, after all, how do they know that Konatsu sent a letter to Ukyo and when will it arrive? Also, how much time has passed between the posting of the letter and its arrival? (I would imagine about a week)
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Jun 25 2009, 01:02 AM
Funny, but honestly, does every nutjob HAVE to follow them to London?

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It is a ninja's solem duty to combat demonic forces and evil spirits
really made me laugh. I don't think Konatsu knows what a ninja's duty really is :snigger:
Actually... I could swear I read somewhere that particular duty was part in parcel to ninja mythology, later pressed into service as assasins. Damned if I can find that now, however. Can anybody confirm that?
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I don't care what the rest of you all say, the letter interceptions were just too amusing. I look forward to seeing what kind of nonsense the rest of the Nerima crew will be bringing to the table. (One of the reasons i like Ozz's stories is the good use they make of Both the Positive and Negative aspects of characters).

And Konatsu makes me grin.

-Himitsu The Hunter
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Honestly, there's already more than enough trouble ahead. Having EVERYONE from Nerima follow will probably be overkill.
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Jun 25 2009, 01:02 AM
Funny, but honestly, does every nutjob HAVE to follow them to London?

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It is a ninja's solem duty to combat demonic forces and evil spirits
really made me laugh. I don't think Konatsu knows what a ninja's duty really is :snigger:
It would be funny if Konatsu admitted in a later chapter that everything he knows about the solemn duties of ninjas, he has learned from anime and manga.
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I forgot to mention this with my previous entry, but given how Nabiki treated the poor mailman (blackmailing him with him struggling to recover from Shampoo and the Kunos, then extorting the money he got out from under him) I really do hope that Nabiki crashes hard into her karma soon. She going to have enough problems in London already, where she is not going to be the Queen Ice Bitch of Nerima anymore, but a nosy foreign girl poking into rich and powerful people's private business. The Kunos are going to crash just as hard, since the Brits are NOT going to be impressed or amused by a couple of crazy whackos from Asia trying to throw around money to get their way. That samurai and Black Rose shtick is going to cut zero ice in England.

Look forward to moar.

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Jun 26 2009, 01:49 AM
I forgot to mention this with my previous entry, but given how Nabiki treated the poor mailman (blackmailing him with him struggling to recover from Shampoo and the Kunos, then extorting the money he got out from under him) I really do hope that Nabiki crashes hard into her karma soon. She going to have enough problems in London already, where she is not going to be the Queen Ice Bitch of Nerima anymore, but a nosy foreign girl poking into rich and powerful people's private business. The Kunos are going to crash just as hard, since the Brits are NOT going to be impressed or amused by a couple of crazy whackos from Asia trying to throw around money to get their way. That samurai and Black Rose shtick is going to cut zero ice in England.

Look forward to moar.

I agree. Now, it's not a secret tht the NWC are a bunch of morons, with very few exceptions, so it would be really nice to see them use all of their usual tricks in England, but unsuccessfully.
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Jun 26 2009, 01:49 AM
I forgot to mention this with my previous entry, but given how Nabiki treated the poor mailman (blackmailing him with him struggling to recover from Shampoo and the Kunos, then extorting the money he got out from under him) I really do hope that Nabiki crashes hard into her karma soon. She going to have enough problems in London already, where she is not going to be the Queen Ice Bitch of Nerima anymore, but a nosy foreign girl poking into rich and powerful people's private business. The Kunos are going to crash just as hard, since the Brits are NOT going to be impressed or amused by a couple of crazy whackos from Asia trying to throw around money to get their way. That samurai and Black Rose shtick is going to cut zero ice in England.

Look forward to moar.

Most of the NWC needs to be beaten by the Karma stick! God, even Ranma deserves a whack... though just one because of all the shit he puts up with.
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"You should. I would!"

"Well not everybodies' you," Ranma frowned as Kunoichi and martial artist trailed behind Setsuna Meiou, who in turn led them through the expanse of King Cross rail station and on to their appointed rounds. Ranma cast an irritated sidelong glance at the transvestite kunoichi. "Look, I wasn't raised as a girl and playing dressup ain't exactly tops on my things to do."

"You do it so well, though!" Konatsu pointed out eagerly. "Remember when we helped Mistress Ukyo? We couldn't have stayed open nearly as long as we did if not for you!"

"Oh?" Setsuna glanced back over her shoulder, clearly interested in the direction of the conversation now. "What's this?"

"That ain't--" Ranma attempted to interrupt before the telling could continue, but Konatsu was already launching into the details.

"Yes, Mister Ranma had the serving room packed, and they lined up down the block. I think every guy in Nerima was waiting that day."

A slight smile escaped Setsuna's casual demeanor. "Is that right?"

"Well, yeah, but that doesn't mean I'm looking to make a career out of it," Ranma shook his head, his psyche warring between pride and gender predjudice. "Hell, most of the time I'm ropped into that crap."

"But your so lucky!" Konatus gushed, fingering the business card albelled 'Flange Fashion'. "Travelling around the world... Meeting new and exciting people... And as a real girl, too! It's so not fair."

Her last words ended as a pout and the redhead couldn't help but to quirk a slight smile, but dispelled it with her next words. "I'm a martial artist, 'Natsu. What'st this gonna do for me besides cause trouble?"

"Perhaps."

The suddenly thoughtful tone caught Ranma's undivided attention. It was rare the kunoichi's demeanor ever appraoched anything close to contemplative and the pigtailed girl raised an eyebrow. "Perhaps, huh?"

"Perhaps we're not so disimilar," Konatsu continued his musings in an almost introspective manner. "Though I had to have my world turned upside down before realizing there was something better..."

Something better... Ranma frowned once more. Normally she would be the last person to ever accuse Konatsu of something so profound, but there it was, even if she weren't so certain of what it meant herself. The reference the nin was drawing to his own past was obvious enough... Pretty much shit on by those tea house weirdos. hell, I'd be jumpin at the chance to get... out... from... The martial artist's through process ground to a halt, staring warily at the taller neo-girl. Konatus noticed the attention and blinked; a completely innocently look inhabiting his face.

"Did I say something wrong, Miss Ranma?"

Only that I should be pickin' my 'better something' before life picks it for me, Ranma's psyche grumbled. And that my situation's apparently bad enough that even you drew the parallel.

"So then how I know what my somethin' better is, then?" Ranma pressed, wondering if there was yet more depth to the nin's insightful or if that was it for the day. Instead, Setsuna glanced back with a smile.

"It hands you their business card and offers you a chance at a life, independence and a whole lot of money in the process," She mentioned easily. "But then again, that could be just me."

The dry look he sent back at her in no way negated the validity of her statement, unfortunately and the Saotome was forced to chew on the fact once more. Was it worth the occasional fashion shoot in his female aspect? Just to have the option of not dealing with the same tired path everyday? Hell, an entire race gotta long just fine the way I am...
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Setsuna Meious suddenly stopped, digging into her purse. Ranma watched curiously until she withdrew a cellular phone, keying a button on it's surface. She pressed it into the redhead's hand before turning back down her path of travel while mentioning over her shoulder, "You can always say no later."

She glanced over at Konatsu, who nodded eagerly, offering the business card back. Ranma eyed both parties before taking the card and absently dialing the number on its face. "Don't suppose this has anything to do with you asking me to take this trip as a girl, does it, Setsuna-san?"

"While I am a fan of efficency, no," She shook her head, guiding both girls back along their path as Ranma pushed the phone to her ear. "Events today specifically require your female aspect in order to achieve the most optimal results."

Ranma shrugged, filing the detail away for future scrutiny as the phone rang in her ear. It picked up after three repetitions with a polite secretary greeting her. "Yeah, Saotome, Ranma. Buckle is... Uh, okay. Sure, yeah. Tell him I accept. Okay... Okay... Yeah, bye."

Konatsu stared at the red head expextantly as they walked. Even the Guardian of Time took a galnce back and Ranma rolled her eyes, finding the indulgence of their curiosity a nessisary evil. "Secretary knew who i was... Says the Buckle guy already scheduled a photoshoot next week, Wednesday."

"My, how presumptuous of him," Setsuna smirked as the trio stepped out of the main hall and onto a rail platform where a crowd awaited the arrival of their train. "And quite eager, unless I missed my guess. I would think he has a lot riding on this."

"If you say so." Ranma shrugged as Setsuna stopped next to one of the platform pillars. "Says he'll send a limo... The shoot's somewhere out in the country somewhere."
[note, revise. Town near opening hellsing OVA1 attack]

"Congratualtions Miss Ranma!" Konatus bubbled beside her, earning a leaded glare that did nothing to dampen her spirits. "Can I come along? Please?"

"Feh, whatever," The glare faded as the martial artist found it impossible to hold any sort of real grudge against the Kunoichi. Instead she attempted to affect indifference. "Just don't make me regret it."

"Thank you, Miss Ranma!"

Ranma simply shook her head, turning back to Setuna. "So we waitin' on a train?"

"Of sorts," The emeraled haired woman nodded, motioning over to the next station pillar nearly ten meters away. "Watch the support and those around it carefully."

Ranma and Konatsu watched, noting little out of the ordinairy about the pillar until what appeared to be an adult accopanying several kids aligned withsleves with the front of the stucture and took to walking toward it at a brisk clip. Suddenly it became very hard to focus on them, as if a sixth sense was insiting soemthing else around him required his immedite attention.

"Focus," Setsuna murmured and both martial artist and Kunoichi redoubled their efforts to ignore the mental itch and were reward as one adult and two childern promply walked into the pillar and vanished.

"Well that was wierd," Ranma blinked. With the disappearance of the people, the itch had vanished. Konatsu likewise stared, then looked around just to ensure the mental compultion wasn't a more tangiable threat.

"Platform Nine and Three Quarters," The Mistress of Time nodded. "A portal through phased reality, protected by spell that compels any who turn their attention on it or those passing through away from the act." Setsuna outstretched her hand and the Time Key materialized with a slight puff, falling into her hand. "Since it is a speaically tuned to those with magical potential, the spell will attempt to turn any away who lack it, increaing in strength with proxmity. Since both of you lack that potential, we'll be using the staff to emulate it."

Both teens nodded. Stealth and misdirection were tactics both were well familiar with and they followed Setsuna as she lined up with the pillar herself. Ranma cocked her head thoughtfully, staring at the pillar they were walking toward. "How's that work anyway? Does it know we're here?"

"No," Setsuna nodded, stepping up to what appeared to be solid matter supporting the bulk of the train stations structure. "It reads as an area of effect spell that simply latches on to any living thing without a magical signature. You are aware of how opposites attract?" Both of her charges nodded. "The spell is drawn to those opposites as soon as they enter its radius. the only way to avoid it is to be magically charged and thus repel the spell."

Ranma grunted her understanding and Setuna paused before testing the threshold of the porthole with the tip of her staff. Her ally was contemplating something concerning the topic of conversation and she wasn't sure if that was a good or bad thing. The guardian mentally shrugged and tapped the portals event horizon, watching as it passed through with little resistance. "Let's go."

Setsuna lead and the two teans followed, instantly stopping as their senses came to terms with what was on the other side. Even Setsuna arched an eyebrow as she took in the difference between what had only seconds before been an covered modren station, suddenly becoming a throwback to the nineteen hundreds. A crowd milled around the now largely outdoor platforms, waiting to board what looked to be a classic steam engine. Whisps of white smoke drifted away from its black steel hull.

"This our ride?" Ranma jabbed a thumb back at the locomotive and what appeared to be a predominantly teenage crowd boarding it.
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Nice to see more.
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I'm mostly ignoring stuff a spellchecker should catch, which there is a lot of!


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Something better... Ranma frowned once more. Normally she would be the last person to ever accuse Konatsu of something so profound, but there it was, even if she weren't so certain of what it meant herself.
Doesn't scan. You have to identify what "something" is, or otherwise change it to accusing Konatsu of sounding profound, or saying something profound.
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Konatus noticed the attention and blinked; a completely innocently look inhabiting his face.
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more depth to the nin's insightful or if that was it
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The guardian mentally shrugged and tapped the portals event horizon, watching as it passed through with little resistance.
portal's, with the sentence in between I'd say "it" needs to be "the staff".
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Of course there is :)
I don't do any serious editing until the I reach the end. Besides, half of this is done at work. Editing comes later.
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Of course there is :)
I don't do any serious editing until the I reach the end. Besides, half of this is done at work. Editing comes later.
Heh, so you too have a job where you have a lot of time to read fics and write them?
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Well, sometimes it's just too busy to write at work. Others it's simply dead, but I still deal with interruptions. Editing tends to take a back seat to creative composition in those instances. I'll catch it on the backside, along with some of the poorer grammer choices :p

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"This our ride?" Ranma jabbed a thumb back at the locomotive and what appeared to be a predominantly teenage crowd boarding it and the Mistress of Time began to distribute their tickets.

"Indeed," Konatsu took his ticket then Ranma hers. "Most of those here are students. If anybody asks, we'll be using the same cover as the last time."

"The Chronomage thing."

"Correct," She affirmed Ranma's supposition. "You, on the other hand, might have to endure some more pointed questions."

"Me?" Ranma eyes the woman warily. "And why's that?"

A smile met the inquiry and it was easy to note the playful edge inhabiting her lips. "You look exactly the same as the day you left the Silver Millennium and trust me when I say you made quite an impression."

Ranma frowned. "Normally when i leave that sort of impression people want to either marry me or kill me."

"My, so full of yourself," Setsuna teased, causing Ranma to roll his eyes.

"You got no idea."

"It's true," Konatsu chimed in pleasantly. "I tried to kill Ranma when I first met him, too."

The woman returned sketically, trading looks between the smiling kunoichi who looked anything but homocidal and Ranma, who simply shrugged at the facts of life. "Charmed life life you lead, Ranma-kun?"

"Hey, I'm with you, aren't I?" the redhead quipped back, returning her humor in full. Setsuna shook her head with a slightly troubled expression.

"When the timegates come back up, I really need to look into your life," She admitted, leading the girl and neogirl to the third passenger car from the steam engine itself where other students were queing. "Normally I try not to let that much slip by me."

"Nah, not much to know," Ranma admitted, shaking her head. "Just martial arts, a training trip, a couple curses, a dozen rivals and just as many fiancees. Heck, 'Natsu is the only one out of that group not tryin' to beat the hell out of me on sight, come to think of it."

"Of course not!" Konatsu shook his head readily, clearly agast at the notion. The kunoichi gained a thoughtful look after a moment of reconsideration. "Well, that is unless Mistress Ukyo ordered me to."

Ranma shrugged and Setsuna shook her head, turning back toward the throng of students.

"ALL ABOARD!" A sharp steam whistle accompanied the ordered, sending a plume of pure white smoke into the air. A dapper suited man hanging from the side of the black and green trimmed engine continued to shout out advisement. "The 11am Express, London to Hogwarts School of Wizardry and Witchcraft will be departing in ten minutes! Please stow all baggage and secure your familiars for the trip! See Mister Mortimer in car two for special accommodations! Again, the Hogwarts Express departs in ten minutes! Please have tickets in hand before boarding!"

"Familiars?" Konatsu perked up, looking around with the question while trying to asertain just what a familiar was.

"Animal companions," Setsuna explained. "Magically enhanced intelligence. The owl that delivered our tickets was undoubtably one. In fact, the Lunar Court was fond of using Moon Cats in an advisory capacity."

"Cats?"

The woman picked up the note of trepidation in Ranma's voice and studied his suddenly up tight demeanoer. A phobia? "Yes, cats. Is there something I should perhaps know about cats?"

"Oh yes! Ranma is deathly afraid of cats!" The redhead opened her mouth, only to have her protest cheerily prempted by her kunoichi counterpart.

"I ain't afraid of 'em, dammit," Ranma snapped, causing Konatsu to cringe slightly and attracting the attention of the closer students. Even Setsuna arched an eyebrow. "I just don't want to be in the same--"

"Mistress Ukyo says you lapse into something called the Neko-Ken," He volunteered further, earning a withering glare from the girl.

The mistress of time frowned with the revelation. "This wouldn't fall under the header of 'exploitable weaknesses,' would it?"

"Good luck on that," Ranma mumbled, then flashed a last glare at Kontasu before sighing. "I don't feel like tellin' the long version, so the short one is that my old man botched a unbeatable martial arts technique when I was kid. The result is that I really don't like cats..."

"Annnnd...?"

"...And that if it gets bad enough, I black out and go cat myself." The martial artist shook her head as Setuna drew the answer out of her. the question was plainly visible in her eyes, so Ranma elaborated. "It's a berzerker state, completely instinct driven. Anything percieved as a threat gets shreaded."

"Shreaded?" Konatsu tilted his head curiously.

"Shreaded. As in sliced apart by meter length ki talons." Ranma nodded solemly. Konatsu blinked, taken back by the answer and even Setsuna's eyes widened. Ranma noted the reaction, letting a terse chuckle out herself. "Yeah, like that."

"What's your... tolerance?" The guardian of time asked, carefully probing the width and bredth of her companions psychological impediment.

"I can... function around the smaller ones," Ranma picked her words carefully. "Larger ones I ain't so good with."
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