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| Trunik | Nov 24 2007, 12:23 AM Post #1 |
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[u][b]Name:[/b][/u] Trunik [u][b]Gender:[/b][/u] Male [u][b]Role:[/b][/u] Student [u][b]SID: [/b][/u] 168804 [u][b]Dorm:[/b][/u] 108 [u][b]Age:[/b][/u]17 [b][u]City-State:[/u][/b] Candoth [u][b] Birthday:[/b][/u] Autumnal Equinox of 743 [u][b]Appearance:[/b][/u] Trunik is a thin child of no exceptional muscular attributes. He is 5’10” tall and at the weight of 140 lb. Trunik has very narrow facial features that are weather worn and make him look closer to the age of twenty; however his eyes give away his actual age with a youthful spark. His hair is straight and black, and his hands have been worn in callous from a childhood of play in the desert and research of the local cacti. [u][b]Clothing: [/b][/u]Trunik wears little armour. He relies more on his speed, flexibility, and intelligence to manoeuvre his way out of danger in fights. Mainly he wears thin leather clothing that does not constrict his movements and yet still allows for some protection. Overtop of this light armour Trunik is always wearing a large cloak that flows just an inch above the ground. With quick movements this cloak has been very useful in the past as an illusion to his slight figure; Long range weapons will pierce the cloak but not find the flesh beneath, only fabric and air. On his hands rest gloves made of a soft yet durable fabric, upon his feet sit hardened leather boots with the sole worn thin from the grindings of a harsh climate that he travelled, and around his arms and forehead are thin bands of leather used for holding whatever small devices he may find appropriate. One of the only metal defences that Trunik has are two bands on his forearms, each made of high quality silver. [u][b]Weapons:[/b][/u] As per the usual of Candoth my character shall have a short sword. However he would also carry on his person a bow and small quiver of arrows, three daggers; one tucked into his boot, another in the folds of his cloak and the third in its concealed sheath in the left side band on his forearm. [u][b]Personality:[/b][/u] Trunik is a polite young man that will not hesitate to accept help from others, but only when it is evident to him that they do have the better way. He emits a mysterious aura and does not like to be questioned about his past. He thinks only of what he shall proceed to in the future. Not quickly angered Trunik has patience for most other people except for those that may try to provoke him. [u][b]Strength: [/b][/u]Trunik has very quick reflex’s and is very adept to using his short sword [b][u]Weakness:[/u][/b] Trunik must become more proficient with his bow as it has had very little use and learn to use his daggers more effectively. He needs much battle experience and must gain better technique. He is also in a different climate now and must learn how to survive in it. The changes in temperature and battle styles used in this new place will severely affect Trunik's defensive skills. [u][b]History:[/b][/u] Trunik comes from a fairly wealthy family that have a history of rigid law followers and military leaders. At a young age he had decided that he would not follow through with this long trail of footsteps and he began to disregard the duties that his elders assigned to him. Hours would be spent dodging away into the sand dunes of Candoth and exploring as far as the days would allow. When he returned home he would get the same lecture everyday, until eventually this stopped. As he grew older Trunik would stay away later and later, learning more and more about the climate that he had been settled into, Learning what to use and what to ignore. He grew a sense of pride in his knowledge, a sense of pride that his distinguished family did not share. They considered his wanderings to be out of character, and out of blood. Try as they might with morning lessons on sword handling and defensive techniques Trunik never truly took interest. On the day of Truniks 17th birthday his father gave him some news, He was to leave for Everland the following morning, to attend a school. They had finally given up on teaching him themselves and were now leaving the duty to the instructors that would hopefully come to accept what they now considered a burden. [u][b]RP Sample: [/b][/u] Trunik dashed out of an open wooden door into the blinding sunlight. His eyes quickly adjust however and his escape continues. Trunik run across an area of sparse grass that is very rare in the area, he pays this no mind however as the dry blades crack beneath the soles of his boots. Across the opening he dashed and through the large metal bars that lay open as he knew they would at this time. His father was expecting a delivery and Trunik would not miss the chance to take advantage of this. It took him only a moment to dash through the crowded streets, his mind had decided upon the path his body would take without Trunik even being aware of this mental action. He dodged by a lumbering cart that carried produce to the open market in the center of the town that at this hour burned in the sun that stood almost directly above him. Their was a loud crash behind him, and the distinct “shink” of the well lubricated plate mail that his guards always wore. Trunik did not think of these hulking oafish beasts as guards. They were wardens that kept him imprisoned in his father’s home. He had little time. The keepers of the towns’ gates would soon have been warned that he had again slipped from the gazes of the brutes that pretended to serve him while doing the bidding of his father. This was a test for Trunik, and it was one that he took often. He had to escape the town for at least the afternoon. So again he takes off down the near empty street. His pace slowed as he came nearer to the gate. His boots made hardly a sound as they shifted under weight while he inched closer to the gate knowing that timing was everything at this point. He saw his opportunity as he gate keeper shifted to the far side of one of the pillars that towered over the side of the gates, in a desperate attempt to avoid the scorch of the sun. Trunik dashed out into the dune covered landscape where he knew he would not be found by the group of men that still approached, just out of sight now. Trunik ran swiftly up the first dune, sand shifted under his feet, as he approached the top he turned to see three beasts shout at him to return. Limber and fast Trunik jumped down the opposite side of the great mound of sand. He falls to his back half way down. Pulling a small piece of fabric over his nose and mouth he allows the sand that tumbled in the wake of his footsteps to cover him in a thin blanket. The guards came to the top of the dune to see nothing on the other side but the reflection of the sun when it caught the side of miniscule granules of quartz. Their ward had escaped once again. They turned and walk back. Trunik smiled slightly as he listened to the scratching sound that their armour now made as the sand worked its way into the thin cracks where the plate joined. He was free to wander on his own for another day. [u][b]Special Power Suggestion:[/b][/u] Trunik has the ability to summon a globe of complete darkness around himself for a time period of 3 minutes only once per day. The globe should be 6 feet in diameter and impenetrable by any light. [u][b]Special Power:[/b][/u] (Assigned by our own beautiful and equally as smart Adrestia) |
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| Drestia | Nov 24 2007, 11:38 AM Post #2 |
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[font=Arial][color=yellow]Not bad but there's a few things wrong with it: Firstly, your birthday says you won't be born for another... 17 years. Weapons are fine besides this: what is the rope for, strangling people?... and what are the tree shavings for? History and RP sample are good. Ability: please me give more specification. I need it before we can determine if the power is ok.[/color][/font] |
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There's so much behind my smile that I can never show. I never said to be like me, I say to be like you and make a difference. ~Marilyn Manson I believe in everything until it's disproved. So I believe in fairies, the myths, dragons. It all exists, even if it's in your mind. Who's to say that dreams and nightmares aren't as real as the here and now? ~John Lennon | |
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| Trunik | Nov 24 2007, 09:32 PM Post #3 |
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Rope is quite a useful device for anything, what i was thinking of is traps or detainment. i will change my birthday tree shavings.. i have no idea what i was thinking anymore so i will remove it this power would allow me to escape from battles with opponents that are at a further range. being aware of your surroundings is more of a skill but i would consider it quite the amazing power and very useful if this character always had an exit |
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| Aldaras | Nov 25 2007, 10:31 PM Post #4 |
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Okay, I let Drestia deal with the power for the most part, so I'll exclude this from my post. Okay, I don't see anything really wrong, I just don't see the need for putting basic fire starting tools as a weapon. Aslo I don't consider not being called a man a weakness, maybe if it read something more like: Trunik has seen little actual battle, so he has little tatical knowledge. That leads up to the next point, I think maybe the character needs a fatal flaw much like my own is close combat. Finally we're at a military academy, not in an actual battlefield, the rope seems like it should have no purpose. |
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| Trunik | Nov 26 2007, 12:34 PM Post #5 |
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I believe that rope can have oh so many uses on [b]and[/b] off the battlefield |
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| Greiver | Nov 26 2007, 08:59 PM Post #6 |
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[b]No rope[/b]. [i]I know [u]I[/u] don't care what you believe. I don't care what your rationale for the rope is, there will be [/i][b]no rope.[/b] [i]Only exceptions might be if it's for sexual bondage (unlikely given your attitude - seriously... traps and detainment? Your a student.) [b]or[/b] if it's actively mentioned by [u]another player[/u] in an RP thread. If [u]another player[/u] mentions that there is rope available, then you may use it. If it's painfully obvious that you begged for it (example: if there just so "happened" to be rope lying around in say, the infirmary) then expect there to be consequences. Fully legit instances of rope (example: Rope being used to tie down / up another something, like a flag) are acceptable. Let it be said there is very little rope around the academy to begin with, littler still accessable. No buying yourself a rope at the weapons shop, items shop... just no buying your own rope. The decision has been made for you, since you seem incapable of explaining even one [u]good[/u] reason why having a rope, a flint, or exotic tree shavings is remotely worth considering as allowable. Feel free to fight with all you got for the flint, but as it stands, the decision is: [/i][b]no rope[/b].[i] If you don't like it, tough. [/i] |
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| Trunik | Nov 26 2007, 09:06 PM Post #7 |
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| Trunik | Nov 29 2007, 01:12 PM Post #8 |
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I believe i have changed everything you have asked for. is it acceptable now or do you have any other helpful suggestions for this |
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| Aldaras | Nov 29 2007, 03:30 PM Post #9 |
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Okay, I say nothing on the way of power, as this isn't my area. So my own is an acceptance, but I feel as though the power needs a bit of tweaking. [i]Accept[/i] |
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My words fly up, my thoughts remain below: Words without thoughts never to heaven go.- Shakespeare, Hamlet Act 3 Scene 3 Asses are made to bear, and so are you- Shakespeare, Taming of the Shrew, Act 2, Scene I Administration: a delicate word for indelicate dealings ![]() Props to Greiver for the banner | |
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| Trunik | Nov 29 2007, 04:36 PM Post #10 |
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Ok i understand you don't do the power thing but your input would still be appreciated. it has been tweaked a little further |
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| Drestia | Dec 1 2007, 10:52 AM Post #11 |
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[font=Arial][color=yellow]I am here to deal with your power. Define [i]"Aware of his surrondings"[/i] please.[/color][/font] |
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There's so much behind my smile that I can never show. I never said to be like me, I say to be like you and make a difference. ~Marilyn Manson I believe in everything until it's disproved. So I believe in fairies, the myths, dragons. It all exists, even if it's in your mind. Who's to say that dreams and nightmares aren't as real as the here and now? ~John Lennon | |
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| Trunik | Dec 1 2007, 11:13 AM Post #12 |
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| Drestia | Dec 1 2007, 11:22 AM Post #13 |
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[font=Arial][color=yellow]Ok better... Not a big fan of the [i]"best way to escape"[/i] thing (seems a tad bit cowardly for one who is going to a military academy) but the other part is good. You have to realize that if you have this power, you won't be able to magically understand when you should use it. Doesn't mean that it is useless, just that it would only really do anything in certain situations. Time limit is good, day to regenerate is good.[/color][/font] |
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There's so much behind my smile that I can never show. I never said to be like me, I say to be like you and make a difference. ~Marilyn Manson I believe in everything until it's disproved. So I believe in fairies, the myths, dragons. It all exists, even if it's in your mind. Who's to say that dreams and nightmares aren't as real as the here and now? ~John Lennon | |
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| Trunik | Dec 1 2007, 09:46 PM Post #14 |
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so what i'm hearing is that i should have a different power. i have no problem with this it would probably be better. Any suggestions, Its all up to you if you want a little time |
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| Drestia | Dec 2 2007, 11:23 AM Post #15 |
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[font=Arial][color=yellow]I didn't say you needed to change it, just that it needs a bit of tweaking before it's acceptable. We want to to take out the [i]best means of escape[/i] part because it doesn't really fit. We also want you to realize that it is only useful in limited situations. We don't want to have to get mad at you because you aren't using it the way it is written out to us. If you really want to change it, that's fine, just realize: I'm sure I could think of something but if you don't want something lame I just assign you, you better give me some idea what [i]sort[/i] of power you want. [i](ex. elemental, transformation, etc)[/i] Or else I might just give you something stupid because I can't think of anything. Sad but true.[/color][/font] |
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There's so much behind my smile that I can never show. I never said to be like me, I say to be like you and make a difference. ~Marilyn Manson I believe in everything until it's disproved. So I believe in fairies, the myths, dragons. It all exists, even if it's in your mind. Who's to say that dreams and nightmares aren't as real as the here and now? ~John Lennon | |
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