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One Of Those Days; I'm not telling,find out for yourself!
Topic Started: Jan 1 2005, 08:48 PM (766 Views)
erfanatic1809
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It was a normal night.Pratt was helping a young female MVA victim,Carter was checking the vitals of a man who fell off a latter,and Weaver was screaming out orders as usual.But Abby had something different going on,something no one could imagine.She came into the ER on time for her shift,with Neela in tow.But something was different about her.Abby seemed more edgy then usual.
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"Hey everyone,whats going on,"Abby asked as she walked in.

"Not much,if you want to finish checking the vitals on Mr.Pinnerbred,you can,"Carter answered as he checked the IV.

Just then,Susan came in for a visit,soon after having Cosmo.

"Wow,Abby,you look big.When are you due?"Susan asked.

"In 4 months"

"Who's the father?"

"Umm...well..."

She was cut off by the sound of an ambulance.

"GSW to the chest,BP is 100/60 and dropping,"The EMT announced quicklly.

"Bring him in to trauma 2.Damn,his stats are dropping.Get the paddles now.Charge to 150,CLEAR!Charge to 200,CLEAR!"

After 45 minutes of this,they stopped.

"Time of death,7:07 pm"

Abby walks out of the room and throws her gloves out,and goes back to the room to shut the machines off.It is then she realizes who it was.

She runs out of the room faster then a speeding bullet,shaking all the while.

Lewis notices this and takes Abby to Curtain 3.Lewis is the only one who knows the relevance of this man.


Well,this is what I have so far,what do you think?
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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erfanatic1809
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PLEASE GIVE ME YOUR INPUT,SO I CAN MAKE IT BETTER,THANKS:)
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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erfanatic1809
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AND A NOTE FROM ME:I DO NOT OWN ANY OF THE CHARACTERS,BUT I OWN THIS STORY.AD I COPIED IT FROM MY OTHER BOARD BECAUSE I GOT NO INPUT ON THAT PAGE
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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:angry: :(
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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erfanatic1809
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PLEASE GIVE ME INPUT,I AM GOING TO THINK THIS IS STUPID SOON,PLEASE,I HAVE MORE GOOD IDEAS,BUT I WANT INPUT ON THIS FIRST!!!!!
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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:grr:
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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decent.. mainly into weaver fics though... take your frustration out on a punching bag not on us.. we hat enot knowing baselines on fics.. without em' we tend not to read...
What don't kill you can only make you stonger...

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Thank you for commenting,I just have a low patience sometimes,sorry,the story is supposed to be a mystery sort of...do you want to hear the next part?
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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Do continue, it'll be intresting to read more ;)
~Andy Griggs ROX~
~I guess the problem with only listening to a patient for fifteen seconds is, sometimes you don't hear everything...and when you finally realize what they were trying to say, you might've lost them forever.
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Thank you,ok,here is more(flashback though!)
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It was 1992,and Abby was a teenager.She was coming home from a party,but she was walking and it was late.She was walking past the bad part of Chicago,when she felt cold metal press up against her back.

"Turn around slowly,and if you scream,I will shoot!"The man with the deep voice said.

She did what he said.As she turned around,she saw a familiar face,a neighbor who she thought she trusted.

"Do you want my money?Take all I have,I have 20 dollars,you can have it!"She said quietly,frightened.

He took her money and pulled her into an alley

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At County in 2004,they pulled a sheet over the man when another ambulance showed up carrying a four year old girl with burns from a fire.

"4 year old female,burned pretty bad.BP is 107/76 and she is stable.Pulse ox 98!"An EMT explained quickly.

"Call the Burn unit and start an IV,"Abby shouted with Lewis attending.

Then while they were tending to the little girl,her mother walks in.

"They called me at work,is she ok?"the mother asked.

"She is in stable condition.You left her alone in the apartment?"Abby asked,awed.

"Well,I have to work!"the mother said.

"Lewis,I am calling in child protective services!"Abby yelled out.

Abby runs to the phone to call this in
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Well,what do you think so far,are you in suspense?
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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It's good and I am wondering what's happening. Please continue

One thing though (sorry): you're skipping around a whole lot so it's kind of hard to understand what's happening. I mean in the first part Abby was pregnant and Susan figured out the father but now they're working on another patient. If it's supposed to be like this than maybe you could add the time everything happens and the date....
~Andy Griggs ROX~
~I guess the problem with only listening to a patient for fifteen seconds is, sometimes you don't hear everything...and when you finally realize what they were trying to say, you might've lost them forever.
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Ok,thanks so much,I find it better when I get criticism because it makes me a better writer,but I promise,everything will come together,there is a reason why i am doin it this way,but I can fix it a bit,do you want the next part now or tomorrow?
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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Whenever you can get it up would be fine with me ;) I'd love to read more please
~Andy Griggs ROX~
~I guess the problem with only listening to a patient for fifteen seconds is, sometimes you don't hear everything...and when you finally realize what they were trying to say, you might've lost them forever.
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Ok,here is more:
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Back to 1992-

Abby was pulled into the alley,but she fought the guy before he could do anything.As she ran away,he grabbed a hold of her sleeve and ripped it off,then he grabbed her again.Just then,a guy about her age comes up behind the older man,and he hits hime in the back of the head,knocking him unconscience.The guy and Abby run out of the alley and the kid takes her to his place,carrying her all the way because she sprained her ankle.She sleeps over there for the night,but first calls Eric to tell him where she is.The kid tells his parents about the girl and she sleeps on the couch there.
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Back in 2004-

Protective services comes and puts the girl in foster care.When Carter notices Abby acting edgy,he has no idea what is going on.Just as he is wondering,a crash is heard outside and an EMT is carrying Weaver in.Weaver is unconscience and it is learned she was hit by a car while walking outside.

"BP is 100/70 and dropping,pulse ox is 98 .She is going into arrest!Start compressions!"

After a little while,she is revived and in stable condition.They bring Weaver up to surgery to repair the damage,but she will be fine.

"It is a slow night,"Neela states.
Dr.Susan Lewis

Lily Jarvik: Anyone seen Dr. Weaver?
Dr. Doug Ross: Follow the trail of partially-digested residents.

Patient:Are you married?
Dr. Susan Lewis:No,I'm a doctor.
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Doing good ;)

try to get a some more details in between though, it's hard to see it all in my head

please post more soon
~Andy Griggs ROX~
~I guess the problem with only listening to a patient for fifteen seconds is, sometimes you don't hear everything...and when you finally realize what they were trying to say, you might've lost them forever.
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